AMAZING STORY! I really enjoyed reading it. Are you still planning on putting up the sequel? I would really love to read it.

GREAT JOB!!

Ok, thanks. It was an interesting story, and I was into it throughout. I think you had a great concept, and...well, I guess it is the real-world type literature. I guess your aim is different from my aim; you want to create something memorably tragic, I wanted some escapism, and because of that difference, I was disappointed in the end. I think that you could have made it all happen a little more slowly at the end though, because there have been times where I have been really, really touched by some tragic ending, but I felt like this ending wasn't it.

I really appreciate your writing and posting this! :D

Wow, this is a nightmare.
I seriously did not read all this just to get cheated out of a good ending. :(
Btw, "government cheaters" gives a good idea of why the police are so determined to find the Underground. That's the kind of "justification" I was looking for earlier.

Intense. I still think you should explain a little more clearly (albeit subtly) why it is imperative that the Underground is not in collaboration with the police department/ why the police department is SO intent on tracking them down...what exactly did Kerstin tell the police that made the response so strong?

Wow, incredible twist!! I had NO idea that was coming! I thought that the papers mentioned earlier were some twisted Underground requirement or something, and when the woman appeared, I thought it might have been Abigail or even an ex, but not that! =D

Wow, that's messed up!! And he still is against Atticus even after all the good things Alaiah said about him? MESSED UP!! o_O

Btw, I suggest that you break that monster paragraph of Alaiah's thoughts up? It's daunting to look at and difficult to read because all the text is together in one huge block. I think it's a great part of the story to have though because it really gives the reader more insight into her character.

^_^

Yeah...the don't thing has really been bothering me in the last two chapters; just ctrl+f it on each page to make sure your conjugations are right. This type of error is the most blatant one.

Nice end to the chapter again!! I love this story. :)

It kind of bothers me every time I see "She don't" or "Head don't" when it should be doesn't though. The thing is I'm not sure if it's a typo or if you are deliberately making the characters speak with bad grammar. It just doesn't seem like it could realistically be the latter because they don't have grammar lapses anywhere else pretty much, and it's widespread instead of just one character using it. Another thing I'm wondering about is why the police would bother with the Underground. I understand why it has to remain secret to the public of course, but in what case would the police go after them?

lol that's a pretty funny ending to the chapter.

Haha, thanks for the reassurance, but I am absolutely hooked already!

Wow, sounds really super promising! :D

sigh... what a sad ending... i so wanted them to be together... i prefered oblivion to this though.. i'm just a sucker for endings where the couple ends up together. but i must say this has been an interesting read, and you've crafted it beautifully in that you didn't reveal too much in the beginning... arr... i still want a happily ever after ending!

This story is growing on me, especially after I the bit a chapter ago in Atticus's POV.

I'm not sure if I like this story or not. Atticus is a bit overly-dramatic.