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no.peace.los.angeles 2006-09-13 ch 1,	abuseWow, that is visual, and wow, those are some disgusting images. I don't know if I like the rhyming that much in this piece, but if it's an anthem, I can see why you used rhyme. Not much for self-hate pieces, but you did a good job portraying your emotions. Keep writing! :)
franticsquirrel 2006-08-25 ch 1,	abuseas far as mechanics, it seems slightly forced. but, the matter of fact tone makes angstishness a real, dark, tragic thing rather than some hollow melodrama-more for show or style. ..and, by the way, I meant to say that I liked surrealistic, and thanks for the review. It's very nice to hear. seems like you're good at writing those as well.
Jecai 2006-06-13 ch 1,	abuseThe aabb rhyme is singsong; this comes off as sort of self-parodying. I like the loop back to 'me'. It's easy for me to keep re-hashing my problems, to reflect. Apathy is more lethal than hate.
James Ingraham-Venne 2006-05-10 ch 1,	abuseThanks for your review of my "Keep a stiff upper lip." Nice observations. Reviews are nice ways for cutting through the numbers and finding kindred minds. They helped me find you, a nice experience, despite the tone of this particular poem. I often wonder about the extra-personal influences drawn from the cosmic memory disk, for want of a better description for humanity's collective mind-life. I've noticed in myself and others I know well how self-destructive or negative thoughts in general can at times have their origen not in our own lives but in the lives of others we don't even know personally. Your poem about the A-bomb victims and your desire to visit Japan and pray in the ashes might be one of these influences that on an unconscious level, and even well before, becoming aware of the A-bomb catastrofy, become identified as one's own experience. In a sense we get 'infected' by the ills of the world. We assume the roles of the victimized, and at times, of the victimizers without realizing that empathy has stolen our identities. Oh well, just some thoughs. The image brought by the line: "rise infection, this is bliss," speaks to me of the transformation of a not-me thing into a me-thing. I can sense the heightened attraction to something that should turn one off, just like an addict of any kind excited at the moment of his or her next fix. I'll be reading more of you and sending some positive thoughts from time to time.
Tipped 2006-04-12 ch 1,	abuseRaw and actually quite unique. Voice was very evident. "picking scabs & flesh again/ taking relief from this horrid sin"- nice lines. Umm... I like the language and the fact that there are no capitals- edgy and daring. Very nice.
rave-master 2006-04-11 ch 1,	abusePersonally I think this is one of the most interesting poems that I've read in a long time, the feeling of pain and misery was so real it gave me chills. Hella good job!
dress her up in fairytales 2006-04-11 ch 1,	abusethe title is nice and caught my eye, i don't think you need to change it. the piece is wonderful as well with the rhyming and such - considering that i can't rhyme worth shit.
faking closure 2006-04-10 ch 1,	abusea slice of anger anyone? heh.. i like this to be quite honest, but i hope you dont feel like this ALL the time.. that would be purty bad. god its cold. loves,-naomi
It Sounds Horrible 2006-04-10 ch 1,	abuseIt isn't easy to make rhyming sound natural but you did it nicely here. I like the tone and how it keeps away from the whole "pity me" thing.
Nostalgic Amnesia 2006-04-09 ch 1,	abuseThis isn't bad at all. Very expressive. Rhyming doesn't sound forced; i like it.

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