very nice. a stroy is crafted as an outrlet of its writer, dont be scared if its choppy. heres something i dint understand though. why did henuki put a sword on his grave even though he wasnt dead? also, it would be cool if henuki's hate consumes him into becoming a dark elf

Make it a length novel! >.>

._. Mah..thank you thank you thank you...Tis god. I like how it ended. He won in the end!...sort of...Anywho. .-. A story of this would work out VERY well...

I really liked this, I was able to visualize every bit of it and enjoyed it. You've also done a great job by being very unique in your story line and character development. It wasn't just some cliché elf/human/dwarf fantasy, you've reminded us that not every character has a happily ever after ending or dramatic downfall, but that some of them simply fade away...Keep up the good work, I'll be sure to drop by and read more ^_^

XO YOU KILLED HIM! T.T Just when I was starting to like him. Aww. I think that should you want to persue it, you could turn this into a very lengthy novel...should you want to of course...-.- You took down Lugonzbi Stone and Ring of Elilidan. I hate you. YOU NEVER FINISHED RING OF ELILIDAN! And if you don't finish it soon, I shall keel you. >3 Very good, a little choppy...and I think there are some things you could...get into more. What those things are, I jsut totally forgot, but...yeah.

Hm...Quite intersting, especially at the beginning when Henuki found out that his parents were murdered by humans. Realization that he himself was an elf was a plus for me. However, this covers too long a period to put into just one short story, and so it was a little hard to follow and visualize.

:( Henuki died...But who was the girl, and the boy?

But excellent story ^_^ -gives thinking cap- o.o for keeps.

Certainly was interesting. But I couldn't follow what was going on very easily.