I love it.

very very very very good. good everything.

so cool. like this chapter. good job

love this chapter 21. very good ideas and like the plot

it very good idea, please write more

? i'm confused...

I am confused. It seems that you reposted some chapters - one after another.

Is John having an affair or not? What kind of a husband doesn't know that his wife is pregnant? Is he blind? Doesn't he see her stomach is growing?

Right now I don't care for any of the characters.

its getting a lot more interesting now! update!

I just thought that the dialogue doesn't sound very real, like thats not really how a 23 year old would talk, I just think it needs to be more relaxed but other than that..its really good and i'm enjoying it.

Right now I don't care for any of your characters. John doesn't seem to care for Jasmine at all. Jasmine is keeping John out from everything that is going on with her and the baby - maybe that is why John is distant. Jonathan is trying to do the right thing - but he should have moved out a long time ago.

I can't figure out where you are going with this.

I like your writing style. Questions about the plot that should be answered someplace: why are Jasimine and John not communicating at all? Is John having an affair? If Jonathan has a lot of money why is he renting a room at their house? Since Jonathan is uncomfortable because of his attraction to a married woman, why doesn't he move out - he can afford it?

As a reader I would like to see those type of things resolved/answered in the story.

Great! I like it! Update soon! Al tough maybe you should get John and Jasmine divorced then have Jasmine have John, but then again it's your story so I'm making no complaints...

jasmine just seems to be leading jonathan on. she's like a fox. i mean yeah, she's depressed with her marriage but that doesn't mean she can go swimming with another man and tell him to take off his shirt and pants.i've gotta say that you have really nice dialogue though D looking forward to the next update

I can't figure out if her husband is just really busy with work or is having an affair. He also seems very oblivious to what is going on around him.

I can't warm up to Jasmine. Considering she is pregnant, her husband doesn't know and she's discussing this with her boarder. Why is she helping him with is unpacking?

Not sure that I like where this story is going.

Not really, much to say. Um, you're great with dialoge, there are a lot of writers who aren't and when their characters talk it shouds unreal, but you're pretty good with it. No really plot climax here, but I can tell it's coming. Please continue.

Sighs