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Reviews For: I've come undone

servatis-a-pereculum
2007-04-03
ch 2,
abuseThis is sort of amusing...

Work on your characterization, it was rather hard for me to be into this story because I wasn't involved with the characters...
camikaza
2007-03-30
ch 2,
abuseyay! nice work! hope you'll update soon, really!^^
freak1012000
2007-02-04
ch 2,
abusei like this story...i can relate to it a lot...except im not gay...my best friend keeps trying to stop me from going any sharp objects...anyway...great job...this is the first story i favorited!
Aqua Draegon
2006-12-30
ch 2,
abuseI love it! I love it! I love it! I know you haven't written on it for months but it's good! I've said it before and I'll say it again you've got talent.
Aqua Draegon
2006-12-30
ch 1,
abuseLoved it. You've got so many good stories that need to be finished. You could be an author one day. I love your work.
just give me november
2006-11-26
ch 2,
abuse... MORE!
:D
love it.
Shadesome
2006-10-26
ch 2,
abuseI like this! Update soon!
Someone
2006-07-09
ch 1, anon.
abuseOk yeah scratch some of what I said I just read your profile and whatever you do I'm sure whatever you do to this story will turn out fine.
Someone
2006-07-09
ch 2, anon.
abuseThis is really good so far, I just found it the other day while searching for something to read on this site and this is one of those that I read(after liking the summary)and so I, obviously, read it and this is a really good story so far, of course it hasn't been updated in almost 3 months now, but anyway your characters are so believable and realisitic, you should really consider updating this story,also just because you don't have more reviews that you do now doesn't mean your writing sucks, no your writing skills are awesome(I don't mean to say that I think that's why(the lack of people reviewing)you haven't added another chapter to this story. Anyway it's a cool story so far, kind of(yeah right) angsty too, which I don't mind, anyway I guess I'll keep checking back every now and then, also I don't mean to sound nagging, I just realized that I might sound that way. Also (I haven't looked at your profile, I don't think so at least, but are you a girl or guy(I can usually tell from a person's writing, their actual writing of a story or their notes before hand), but I'm sure other people can too. Anyway this has turned into be a very long review so...good story here.(and looking at your profile now, your the writer of Denial is not just a river in egypt,...now I know where I found this story, duh, anyway I think that story is awesome, not to mention hilarious, but you should also considering writing more of this one too!
Shadow1290
2006-06-02
ch 2,
abusehey i love this its funny!! MORE SOON!
xXx-imperfection-xXx
2006-05-02
ch 2,
abuseWhoosh! That was wonderful.

I have a Mr. Carver, he doesn't have a nice **, but he's really kind.

I quite like the way you explain how your characters feel.
PrettyAwkward
2006-04-22
ch 2,
abuseThe story is going places, I like how Asher says that he knew that Conner was gay all along and how he says that he is gay too, without actually saying that he is. Update Soon.
princess max
2006-04-20
ch 1,
abuseNice start. I love the name Asher and that he's painted his walls neon green. Connor seems very caring and genuine.
PrettyAwkward
2006-04-11
ch 1,
abuseThis story is good so far. You should continue with it. Update soon.
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