Liked it. You said in your response that it was a song -- did you have a tune for it already? If so, I'd love to hear it. I'm sure it's really thought-provoking. The lyrics sure are.

Liz-Beth,I don't know if this one really gives a message at all... sure the last sentence is very touching and all, but the whole poem/short story didn't really lead up to it... But the picture of the whole plot is really good...

It's not really based on anything. My friend and I had to write a piece about something (birthdays, , etc.) and we wrote this piece.

what's that based on?