this made me smile. i like the last two line. your voice is so powerful in all the stuff you write. and i really like that.

Woah, too many layers for much conscious analysis. Hopefully if I ramble too long some sense will float out of the mass of words.

I like especially the part of your lover having a new girl. To think deep thoughts, to have babies with; and then you talk about yourself in a baby-like way it's fascinating. And the last two lines send me reeling in a thousand directions, who knows what I really understand from this right now. (I'll check back later when I've exorcised a poem I'm trying to finish and when I've had more sleep, so I can give you saner critique.)

truly