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| La Gitane 2006-04-11 ch 1,   | Very amusing! The brevity works well here, and I'm embarrassed to admit that the first thing i did was try and figure out how many people had given you their advice! A lovely way of expressing the idea. :) |
| Tipped 2006-04-11 ch 1, | i like the last two lines- very unique, very creative. I would try playing with words a little in the first part, though. |