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thewrongvine 2008-03-31 ch 3,	abuseHehe, nice story. I say the same thing to you =], a little like Naruto in the chunnin exams. Maybe you could make your chapters a little bit... shorter? :). Easier on the eyes. Good job anyway, even if i'm so late in reading this.
Cassie-Hime 2007-11-14 ch 1, anon.	abusewah; Pandora's box! that was gonna show up in my story- lol ohh wells sounds interesting.. ill keep reading!!:)
JadedOne 2007-07-11 ch 1, anon.	abuseContradictory to my review, I read the whole thing and I'm very sad to see that it's been discontinued, while it sounded like Naruto, the characters were original and it was beginning to drift away from it very quickly. I guess I'll just continue reading your other works.
SilverIsamu 2007-06-24 ch 8,	abuseAww! I wanted to see what would happen next...Oh well, I guess I'll go and read Sacrifice. It looks cool anyway. T_T What a shame. It wasn't THAT much like Naruto...
SilverIsamu 2007-06-24 ch 7,	abuseThis was so cool! I wonder what will happen next? goes to read another chapter
Nanao Nagase 2007-05-04 ch 8,	abuseJesus. I thought you dropped dead or something, to be totally honest. You've been gone for quite some time. Kind of sad to see you end Fated, but I'm glad you will still continue to write on Fictionpress. Update Into the Void soon? Nanao
Rin 2007-05-03 ch 8, anon.	abuseAw...Now I'll never find out what happens...Dag Fudge it! Oh well...I still have Into the Void. It's nice to see you writing here still! I thought you died! Do update Into the Void soon! I want to read it!
Kishimoto Erika 2007-01-10 ch 7,	abuseYeah, an awful lot of dialogue in this one, but still good. I was confused by the boldface content at the top, talking to the characters and whatnot, but whatever. The fact that it reminds me of Naruto is a good thing, and it sort of reads like a manga as well. I can just imagine going to next panel; your characters are so animated at times. Keep up the good work!
Kishimoto Erika 2007-01-10 ch 2,	abuseThe names are interesting. . . not too common here in Japan anymore. A flare of Masashi Kishimoto's Naruto seems present through this, but honestly, I only started reading this because I'm working on a shinobi story myself and wanted to size up the competition. Just kidding. Anyway, it looks pretty good so far. . . though I'm definitely getting a Naruto vibe from it. I'll continue to read.
FFNeko 2006-06-30 ch 7,	abuseYay, another chappy! I like your story so I don't mind if there is a lot of dialogue
Oni Starwind 2006-06-27 ch 3,	abuseYea the begginning was pretty funny with the rules. And its sad how that girl died with the shurikens and stuff very strange. I did get a little confused with the charecters cuz theres so many. But good job non the less and i hope it strays away from the naruto story line.
Oni Starwind 2006-06-27 ch 2,	abusefinally got through it. Reminds me of naruto hope its not a rip off. Very well written. My favorite charter now is B-ko i dont know why but ilike the name. Plz in future chapters shorten it up. THis coulda been split into 3 chapters but whatever floats ur boat. Good job.
sasuke-kun 2006-06-26 ch 2, anon.	abuseI know i promised a review but im tired from having to clean the kitchen im sorry i broke the promise but tommrow after i take a test a school i promise to read if it doestn storm.
Rin 2006-06-26 ch 7, anon.	abuseAw, Rin loves the action and suspense. I hope Joben doesn't die! sheilds Joben from the fire He's mine! takes off running with him
Uxinta-Taka 2006-06-22 ch 7,	abuseI really like the way you do your action squences. They are fast-paced and more-or-less clear. The dialogue is wonderful and so is your in-depth description. I have 2 pointers. First, it would make it clearer if you would put some sort of symbol or page break between different character's seperate battles. Skipping from 2 people fighting to 2 different people to 2 more people makes it a bit difficult to understand how it fits together, even if they are on the same team. Also, you have a lot of characters. It is difficult to remember the hair and eye color of each without refering to your descriptions in other chapters. When you refer to someone it would be easy to include the name or team so as not to get the characters mixed up. I enjoy this story so much. Thank you for updating. I look forward to your next installment.

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