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| Pheobe Meryll 2006-04-13 ch 1,  | abuseI really enjoyed this essay. It was gentle, reflective, and just nice. I like how you explored all aspects of beleifs about death, raising questions but not neccisarily attempting to answer them. I felt that you strayed a little from what you had mainly established (that death is fearful) when you said 'death is the escape from life.' That would have been a good part of your essay but i don't think you expanded enough on it for it to fit in. Your grammar is very good too; the only consistant grammatic error I found was one of singular verses plural, for instance: "but when someone dies are you sad for them or sad for yourself?" ..."Someone" is singular and "they" is plural, so if you replaced "They" with "him" or "her", it would make more sense. It's a common mistake, something to watch out for. I hope this review didn't come off as too critical - this essay caught my eye and was probably the most enjoyable I've read on this site! Best luck. |