Reviews for The Story of How I Died One Day

Marie 2006-06-25 ch 1, anon.	abusehaha thats today! (june 24) what was the signifigance of june 24? i didnt really get that. and the sentence: "I shook ferociously until finally his arm popped off!"i dont think needs an exclamation point.(it makes you sound a bit bloodlusty)otherwise good writing!
Cassandra 2006-06-15 ch 1, anon.	abuseThere is a good story there.. but dont you think it should be from a different point of view? i dont think it being from arthers point of view didnt make the story seem.. real? i dont know how to explain it.. but i did like the plot and theme of the story. Good Job!
Ironman316 2006-04-13 ch 1,	abuseI thought the story was really good. I loved the imagery i thought you did really good on that. The only thing i thought you could work on was that the ending came up really quick. I don't know maybe just build up to the ending and make it a little longer other than that it was really good. i also like how you added the friend into it at the end. Awesome job!
Rachel 2006-04-12 ch 1, anon.	abuseWow... that was really really good i liek iot alot the only thing that was wrong with it was you spelled a few things wrong here and there. And also i would reccommend not expaling what that weird stuuf in your eyes is from your tear ducts yea thats i think could be removed but i still liked it alot