W00t! I love this too! You are an excellent writer! W00t! Greatness XD!

I like the bit at the start and end. Oh and the first line :)

i like this... the begining and ending stanza is especially great

im have no idea wot 2 say..i do luv it.. but its made me speechless

luv u XoXo

Well first off thankyou much for your review(s), and I'm sorry that mine for you are much less frequent. I'm rather lazy. Though I do enjoy reading poetry, and I really should make myself do more of it. You can get alot out of reading a poem of someone else's, and it can only broaden your own skills, right? ANYWAY!

"Perfection is an illusion for we are all the same" is one of the lines I picked out of this poem to say that I loved, though all of the lines fit together and had something beautiful in them. Well, it doesn't take much for me to know why I like that line so much because it's so true to how I feel about things...well partly. I like the conflicting thoughts in it. Because in a way perfection would be that everyone is exactly the same...but in a way that's imperfection because we need diversity. Okay...that probably didn't make much sense but I tried.

"Crippling intelligence that has taken a lifetime to gain" Another line that struck something in me. Which is a great line because it has taken us so long to get where we are, to gather all this we know. But in the end it'll probably be that same intelligence we strive for that ends up being the end of us.

Well, anyway, now that I've shared my thoughts with you for whatever they mean, I'm going to say flat out that you did a really good job with this poem, especially because it's pretty long. With long poems I tend to stray incredibly far from the point, but you stayed to it well. Besides that it's very well worded. So, all-in-all good job.

ANNA

*floored* *speechless*it's amazing...and I completely agree with you...I love how easily your poems flow...and I really liked "Behind every sign is a symbol to be unearthed,For everything has a deep dark secret;Behind every smile, is a person crying for help,Waiting for someone to pull them from darkness."its awsome how true it all is...there's more to everyone than we realize it up.-pammy- x3

i totally agree with everything in this poem. wonderful job! keep up the awesome and touching work.

You did it again, J; nothing can beat what you write. I can't wait to talk to you again; State FCCLA was these last three days and I had a BLAST.

B.

Did someone flame you one this, is that why it says there are no reviews but there are two on line? I hate flamers. Whatever. This piece...very nice. Well written, there's just the slight overtheline straightforward phrasing used in the italic bits. "Because eternity doesn't last forever" Nice line. It fit neatly into that stanza. Great job, you are progressing so.

I'm keeping this short and brief, otherwise I'll give you a whole rant that will takes you weeks to read. lol. I'm glad that you voiced your opinion; a lot of people are scared to do that, and I admire you very muchly for doing so! I admit I'm scared to post my religious poems because people will have a go at me; so I'm glad you've posted this. Don't worry about me.

I think some other people won't be as understanding as me as though. Of course, some will agree with your thoughts, a lot won't. I've seen the really religious on this website get very offended. I remember when I posted my poem about God and you were very understanding and judged it completely on the way it was written; so I'll do the same back to you, even if it does hurt. You write really, really well Josh, you've come a really long way as a writer, and I'm proud of you. You're an awesome person! And yeah, I don't really have anything else to say. :(

Keep writing though! _

Anna _

WOW! What can I say Josh! This rocks it. Totally!