That was Awesome!

Yeah, the last two chapters were slightly confusing, but I was probably reading with eyes skimming rapidly across the letters, and I just devoured your writing. There were hardly any spelling errors, only one I spotted was the word 'quashed' and who knows, maybe it is a word? Inspired by Cillian Murphy eh? He's hecka hawt, and it's regretful that HE didn't show any feelings for Deana, or 4991 in the end. Do 'steadied his hand', 'glimmer of resolution' hint that he may have at least friendly feelings for her? Or the fact he didn't consider her death as feeding his blood lust - I'm just finding little excuses for him to have liked her even the tiniest bit. Ah, and impossible love is always the best.

Wonderful job.

I really liked this story. The writing style was unique and even with very few details I could still get a sense of the characters and they were still three dimensional.

Very, very interesting. Your writing style is really awesome; big words and complex sentences that really make a statement. The story itself was pretty neat, too - I can totally see how Deana fell in love with him, as masochistic as it is. There were a few parts that were really confusing, but they mostly cleared up in the end. I really love the way you characterized everyone through their dialogue and actions, not thier looks - except for him. Its neat, the way we can truely envision him, but everyone else we just kind of know. It really helps focus the story on him. I also like that he doesnt have a name. Lol, but that's just random.

A stunning end to a wonderful story. I'm glad you chose to close the tale in this way - a happily-ever-after ending would not have done it justice. Powerful, thrilling, very enjoyable. Thanks!

Beautifully written. Your style is very intriguing and suspenseful. The ending was perfect; I wouldn't have done it justice but I have been toying with a similar plot line. It was a pleasure to read.

Well I don't know about your other readers. but this was a pretty nice short story, I read all seven chapters in one night. Which made the book better because I din't have to suffer from the feeling of suspense.

Nicely done.

Heh, I'm in love too.

I like it. Keep going.

RAWR.

*bows down to dbzkeri's latest*

I love the story, I think I'll be addicted to this. Heh.

I can't wait for chapter 4!

Evil is beautifully seductive and I think you've conveyed that very well. Nice writing!