Ah. Jealousy in a dare.

Lyle liked Devin, I'm guessing? A very nice touch to this.

Dark and well-written...you managed to get a lot of action and plot in a short amount of time, which was impressive! I liked the ending (well, the whole thing, really), especially that last line.

Brilliant. Bloody brilliant.

i like how you wrote this story! the 'other' boys don't seem human at all, yet they are...but they're not...more like a pack of monsters or something, and when they shriek at the end i was reminded of vampires dying in the sun (or more specifically, that one scene in Interview with a Vamp where the whole coven is burned). it has that cult-ish feel to it. though the grammar may be off the writing is excellent.

Holy Fuck Jack...!

This was just...unbelievably well written and terrifying throughout. *lol* It's a good thing, I promise.

Oh wow wow wow... I was so not expecting that. Well...I was expecting thema;sjdlasjd I can't explain it... Ugh. I just didn't think he'd kill him and stuff... I love the last sentence. Great, great, great job.

lovelovelove