Wow... Very vivid. That reminded me strongly of the scene in Brothers Grimm where the woman seduces Will and makes him her new... whatever he was supposed to be. The second to last line, typo- charmly =D Maranwe Telrunya

Woah awesome! Nice use of repition..."Ripping and tearing and devouring my flesh

Raking with her exquisite, sharp nails..." thisis the the best 2 lines of the poem, in my openion.