Ooh, I love it.

I think the poem flows really well and I'm just in love with the whole concept of Narcissus not being able to 'walk past mirrors and shop windows and keep his eyes tightly shut.'

And the whole 'marriage' thing was well played out!

this really caputures vanety in a bottle...i like - maybe you should include some of the ideas of echo - the nymph who fell in love with him in the greek myth - ahh but thats just me being rambley. keep up good work ;)