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| JesterKing'sPawn 2006-05-05 ch 7,   | o this is an interesting chapter! *pokes you in the middle of the forhead* more chapters soon! |
| JesterKing'sPawn 2006-05-05 ch 6, | *sits on ceiling* nice chapter, as always, of course! update again soon! |
| JesterKing'sPawn 2006-05-01 ch 5, | ahahhaha funny chapter! more chapters! update son! |
| Annabella Chronos 2006-04-30 ch 5, | Augh! I loved chapter 5! XD The emotion was just right, and the dialogue was perfect for pirates! The ending makes me want to read more about this 'Ellie' Oo I'm flooded with anticipation... |
| JesterKing'sPawn 2006-04-24 ch 4, | awsomeness chapter, update soon! |
| Annabella Chronos 2006-04-23 ch 4, | Ack! Sorry for not reviewing your third chapter! ^^; I had mucho technical difficulties. Anyways... I can't say there's anything I would change from the third or fourth chapters. You show Jade's emotions pretty well, though not Headmaster Drake's (which isn't exactly important). Oh! The only thing that I think's wrong is at the beginning of the fourth chapter; I have no idea where HD is. XD I assumed he was sitting somewhere ahead of Jade, but I was really just guessing. If you said where he was, then it would probably explain why she was so surprised that he was behind her. ...I think that's it... Oo Hazelnut cream. |
| GABE22 2006-04-21 ch 1, | ITS A GOOD STORY, NICELY WRITTEN, BUT TOO SHORT. |
| JesterKing'sPawn 2006-04-18 ch 3, | awsome story so far! update soon! |
| Sophia 2006-04-17 ch 2, | Hey, good story. The scene switch did cause a bit of unsettlement until I realized that this chapter was taking part in a different place. It remained a bit ambiguous until some paragraphs down. Also, you remained a bit unclear about who the character Jade was. I'm a little unsure about whether she is the same person as Kali or a completely different character. Otherwise, this was a very good beginning to a promising story. Your writing style has a way of keeping people interested and reading your story. |
| Annabella Chronos 2006-04-16 ch 2, | O,O You said my name! I'm so grateful! XD *le cough* Ahem. The next chapter was beautiful! I think there's enough detail in it to know exactly what's going on and where and why. The thing I love most about this chapter (and that I DON'T see enough in literature) is that you showed how the characters reacted to each other! I don't even need a description of their personalities with what the others say or act around them. |
| Adakua 2006-04-16 ch 1, | Your summary caught me, so I read it. Anyway, I just like to say I really enjoy this it's nice. Till next time ~Waterhealer |
| Annabella Chronos 2006-04-14 ch 1, | I like it! The beginning was a great hook (ha ha, get it? hook? X3 Oh that was lame) and I was excited to read the whole thing! I would like to read more, whenever you come out with more. The only thing I could say as critique is that there should be a little more description in the chapter, but that may just be me (my stories are drowning in detail). Gah! Can't wait for more! |