this is really awesome
you should listen to the song

fatalist palmistry by why?

yes..that's the band name...why?

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I appreciate the love/lust in this
the pull between the two and the temptation always lingering

beautifully written, i like how each line says so much in so few words

AH! that is SO BEAUTIFUL! I WISH I COULD FAVE DAMMIT DAMMIT DAMMIT!

kinda reminds me of lyrics from a psychedelic 60's band in a sick way. nice one.

lovely imagery, i love the theme. i really like the half rhymes: 'her like will be short/ (wrinkles few)/ teeth marks./ salty residue' beautifully worded. great piece!

beautiful, again. but i read it more than once because i saw differently at the beginning than i did at the end, something you make me do a lot. which is great.

m.. the opposite of delicious. (for the character) i really like it.

love it.fabulous writing.

Very cool, seductive. Great analogies and play with words.

beautiful. i always love the short ones with the amazing imagery.

the gypsy's word saysher life will be short(wrinkles few)

brilliant lines. i loved every second. kinda reminds me of my friend's vindication for smoking ^_^ great read

painful and lovely.

"the gypsy's words says her life will be short"

^that line was so intense. it explains so much in the poem too.

i loved it.

love that last line.. great piece

Love how this was written, and I really like the last line. Wonderful work, write on.

WOW...This is so amazing, so much energy and fire in your words, well done, this is perfect, so pure!

"love's secret is lust"

beautiful, beautiful. that last line is a killer.

~* noelle