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| Eclipsia Soulbird 2008-05-16 ch 1,  | abuse(insert maniacal laughter) Because: A.) I'm reviewing and you can't stop me. B.) The interaction between Rachel and Chris. C.) I like to laugh... maniacally. |
| Satyrica 2007-06-17 ch 1, | abusevery nice! i read the original and liked it, and this is even better! god, i so remember ken - is it going to be the same storyline? oh, and i also like the changes to rachel - it never bothered me in the original version, but reading this, it seems right that she be a bit more tough and crude, after all that's happened. please keep writing - well, rewriting :) |
| Skeeter the Groundhog 2007-06-12 ch 3, | abusethat was a fun chapter. i'm so terribly envious of rachel. she makes me want to grow a backbone and be a rebel... or something mildly interesting like that. i can't wait until you update again! -Skeeter the Groundhog |
| urjellingcauseimevil 2007-06-12 ch 3, | abuseAH i need UPDATES!! *collapes in misery* kira |
| yonderwindow 2007-06-10 ch 3, anon. | abusei love it. pleasee updatesoon! |
| Randomisation 2007-06-09 ch 3, | abusesoo glad u updated! really gr8 story! please continue!! |
| Essevera 2007-06-08 ch 3, | abuseOkay, good relief to find your story. The other ones I liked but it was a disappointment after awhile. Haha...so they're Filipino? Just a question. (New reviewer if you missed it.) |
| pinkfairydust 2007-06-01 ch 2, | abusepleeaasse update!! its so good!! maybe do the next one from another persons POV... i dunno but pls update!! |
| Sarah D. F. Wall 2007-05-23 ch 2, | abuse:D I really liked this story. Nicely written; very...good? Sorry, I'm at a loss for adjectives. :p |
| cheesecake.thief 2007-05-03 ch 2, | abuseI like the fact that she's not overly aggressive and still 'nice' enough to help others in need. |
| K.B. Hanna 2007-04-15 ch 2, | abuseI never read the first verision of TGME, but from what I've read so far of this one, it's pretty good. I like Rachael's sassy, don't mess with me attitude. I get tired of whiny girls. The only thing I'm not quite sure on is the flashback scenes in the beginning. I'm taking it that Rachael was verbally/emotionally abused, but I don't think you did a good enough job portraying that. The abuse scene you wrote seems rather played out on fictionpress. It's always the male calling the female a **, **, pathetic, whatever. When in reality, from what I've witnessed, they usually play more on a different scale. They use a form of almost brainwashing the people. I think, that even though the mother didn't seem like it, she almost reminds me of another emotional abuser eventhough she's part of the abused. Anyway, I need to go and do some cleaning, or I'd give you a longer review. Just wondering, did you send me the next chapter of DD, or are you still editing it? Because if you're done, I didn't get it yet. |
| atreyu love 2007-04-01 ch 2, | abuseGrah! more!? please? lol update! |
| HawkDancer 2007-03-10 ch 2, | abuseI like this story. Rachel has a strong personality. This part of the story confused me a bit, though: the girl said in her hands said. Update soon! Happy writing! ~HawkDancer |
| :-) 2007-03-10 ch 2, anon. | abusem you really like to rewrite your stories, don't you? This version seems to have a lot more angst than the first one. |
| Randomisation 2007-03-10 ch 2, | abusei like this! please continue!! |