This is really nice. The dream thing was way cool.

Aw, that's so true! You have good imagery and flow in this poem, and I like your personification of the world and how like a personification of the devil it is. I believe that "He pushes a think in front of us." contains a typo that should be 'thing', but honestly think works too. :)Cy

I love this, how the rhyme seems to mock at the narrator and her/his naivety. Definitely going onto my favourites.

Wow! This is really cool. Amazing poem. Keep writing!

Anna

Very good. I love the fact that this isn't just another love poem. Amazing job.