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| Banshee Junior 2007-01-05 ch 1,  | abuseThe tension here is so tangible it could be sliced into slices! This is really true of many of the budding relationship I have seen that go through the stage you're talking about. Even when they stay perfectly still, you can feel the air changing here. Even the way you've placed syllables make them feel heavy, even when they're not. Wonderful. |
| S.C.R.E.A.M.I.N.G. 2006-12-31 ch 1, | abuseI liked this a lot. Why, you might ask? Well, because of all of the imagery and the emotion I felt in this piece. You managed to make me think about this entire thing, and I think that it brings on great meaning. I love how true it is, too. --Ally |
| tesa131313 2006-12-09 ch 1, | abuseOh I love this! I like how you symbolize with music. It has a lot of imagery and it's well written. |
| Lord-of-Fools 2006-11-20 ch 1, | abuseOoh very nice. I especially like the last lines- they make a very good point. Can't think of anything I can say by way of criticism at the moment as it's too early, but it's a beautiful poem. |
| Marionette Dancer 2006-09-26 ch 1, | abuseoh, wow, that was amazing. i dont think that i can say anything else, other than it was, *sigh* absolutely beautiful...i have nothing else to say ~lexa |
| Leaving Here 2006-08-11 ch 1, | abuseso can you! :) |
| Windup Hopping Lederhosen 2006-08-09 ch 1, | abuseThis is so perfect. There's nothing bad I could say about this. Huzzah! |
| Consolation 2006-08-03 ch 1, | abusedescribes young love quite well, raging hormones and impulsive behavior, we probley don't know better, or do we? Only time will tell |
| Samana 2006-07-27 ch 1, | abusei like it a lot, i like the piano line, its very well wrtten, its not vulgar, but it brings about that kind of interest, i like this a lot, good descprition, i like you free verse better than your rhyming, just an opinion, peace |
| addie pray 2006-04-26 ch 1, | abuseGreat descriptions. I really like that you took the time to lay out intricate descriptions. The ending was lovely as well, lending the message a clear ring. |
| Lisa Parry 2006-04-19 ch 1, | abuseEffective poem. I thought by decribing everything else but the act it emphasised the point of the last line. The tension was also convyed well by 'there’re noises we think only we can hear,/ a musty clarity and a single note'. Good poem :) |
| Shimmering Crane Bird 2006-04-15 ch 1, | abuseYou are very good. This was a wonderful piece. |
| simply meg 2006-04-15 ch 1, | abusehmm... I like it... Made me smile :) Write On! |