 123454321 2007-01-05 . chapter 1Hmm, after reading your other reviews, I feel like a cynic, but here goes. I can't say I'm a fan of this poem. I was intrigued by the title and got my hopes up. The rhyme pattern seemed to make the rhymes slightly stressed and it didn't seem to flow well. It also seemed somewhat repetitive. Ignore me if you can't use any of this critiquing because I can see all I did was point out what I found fault in and didn't give you any alternatives that I found appealing.
-J.A. |