hey cool story...can't wait to read more! you totally caught me off guard with her being sold!

okay, so maybe it's a teensy bit cliche, it's still really good. You can totally feel the emotions Talia is feeling.

This really sounds like Cinderella, but when I read your summary saying that Talia is going to find the prince. I'll think it'll be totally different in later chapter. Anyway, nie work. Keep up the good work.

Waterhealer

I liked this story, it seems like it'll be a great one. A cinderella spin-off, maybe? But still good, keep working on it!