It still says much about Talia that she keeps marks for how many times she cleans the stables. She is rather a little Cinderella type girl, isn't she.

It is odd that the stepsisters want her mother's wedding gown. I wonder why.

The description of the servant quarters was good. I like the bit about the light. Of course, being the nocturnal being that I am, I would enjoy this.

It is a wonder that the Madame keeps any help by the way she treats them. I would think that Maggie would be the only to stay because of her dedication ot Talia. Walton sounds like a fun guy there, and no wonder he works under these conditions.

Sorry that it has taken so long to get to this. I have had a bad spring and summer. Busy, you know.

Anyway, I find the chapter a little confusing. I am a sucker for continuity. Smack me. Anyway, am I to take it that the sisters are stepsisters? After all, they are older.

Madame is looking for a new husband? That's bigotry if she doesn't kill off the first one first, you know.

Okay, enough of my complaints. Talia sounds like a fun girl, maybe not the brightest, but she is fun. I don't know if it is lack of intelligence that keeps her to her routine of cleaning the stables and keeping track of it, but it does say a lot about ehr character.

The stranger has issues as well, but I am certain that will come to light later on. I do wonder why he was sleeping in hay, unless he likes that kind of thing. I have characters that go for that kind of thing.

Yay, I loved this last - LONG - chapter. I know how you feel about 'Ella Enchanted.' It's my second favorite book of Levine's, right after The Two Sisters of Bamarre. I watched the preview of Ella Enchanted, saw that Anne Hathaway was playing Ella, and knew it was going to be awful. I saw the end of it on accident because my friend's siblings were watching it. I was, needless to say, disgusted.

Anyway, I love this story. :) It makes me smile and laugh, which is a very good combination, haha.

Can't wait for the next chapter! Ciaos!

oh. my. goodness. i've waited for so long for an update! i'm so glad that i did not give up on you. this chapter was truly amazing!

it was definitely worth the wait, however, i would appreciate it if there was not such a long gap in between this and the next chapter. keep up the good work! :)

I loved that riddle! I really like your story, so keep it up!

Sometimes cliche is good. I like it a lot!

Woot! Great update... :D

nice

Aww! This is such a cute story! It's funny too! I just managed to finish reading all your chapters up to date. They're really good! Good job on so far! Update soon!:]

Whew! Sorry it took me so long to return your review - I am rather bogged down with revision which is probably even less fun than that sounds!

Anyway, I like this so far! Poking people with pitchforks is always fun. I like how at first Talia couldn't tell whether it was a boy or a girl in the hay - that was a nice touch and funny! Talia is also really cool and likeable so far, and her sisters do sound rather nasty. I like the way that 'bloke' is used as an insult too (although I use it all the time anyway, although I think it's quite an english thing).

'Do you always go stabbing forks in sleeping peoples' bums or am I the only one to enjoy that rare pleasure?' haha great line

So who is this mysterious stranger in the hay? Exciting!

CCwise there aren't many errors in this - it's well written so yay for you. I found a couple of uber nitpicky things:

'he, it, stood and started picking pieces of hay from his body, his clothes, everything.' I think that the he should be capitalised. This happens a couple of times (like literally two) but I can't remember the other time. Meh...I could be wrong about this.

'I...um...apologize'...'you should be' This is really really uber nitpicky and a tiny error, but I think it would make more sense if it was 'I'm sorry' for the first part or 'you should' for the second, just so that the conversation flows properly.

This was good, and doesn't look too cliche at all. Congrats for passing 200 by the way (yes, I read profiles...it puts off revision!) seems like you deserved to from this!

Yes, a very long chapter indeed. Hope you will be able to update more sooner, again!

By the way I think you meant 'dragged' instead of 'drug'?

Yay! I was so glad that you updated and even happier when I got a chance to read it! It was marvelous and I can't wait to read the next chapter! PLEASE update soon.

hi! this was an awesome chapter! oh! does Tobin really like her? oh dear, all during her "froghood" I was laughing so hard! keep it up!

I haven't read Ella Enchanted, but I agree that the movie is an autrocity. I do need to get the book from the library...

So glad to finally see another chapter! Sorry it took me so long to read and review it.

Haha... "Why was I noticing all this pointless scenery?"

What, "my boys"? That made me laugh. It's like they're her own personal jesters. Hehe.

Ooh, wait, is she still a frog? it's been so long...

How does a frog cross its arms?

Seems like, with her amazing attitude, she'd be indignant at being called a "he"

Haha, the Tobin seducing thing was hilarious and so totally perfectly fitting for him! I was kind of waiting for him to try something. Hehehe.

I guessed his name so easily! Heheh. I was telling them "it's Troll, sillies!"

I hope you get the inspiration to update sooner than this one came! I love this story.

Maranwe

Ok ,I know this is late but I had to go back and re-read the last chapter . Ok first of all Yay ! Your back !I thought that you were one of th thousands of people on here that suddenly gave up , but your not _ .

And finally re-reading the last chapter and reading this one I must say WoW . They are both excellent chapters specially this one and they remind me why I , and everyone else love this story so much . This chapter made laugh ,smile and shake my head . I love this chapter down to every single word . Great job and I am so happy that Talia is back to her regular self and Oh ,wow the part about her turning naked in front everyone Ek ! Hmm , did Owen see her when tis happen ? I would think that he would make a few remarks about this to her . Over all LOVE this chapter !

M.