omg nickys parents are such dislikable characters! i want to slap kay for being such a cold hearted bitch. nicky seems to be having a normal 16 year old reaction to what his parents are putting him through ,and then he is blamed for being angry! Somthing isnt adding up when trying to understand the famillial dynamics. its not realistic. maybe i am to much of a optamist (or pych geek) to wrap my head around around this story. im going to give it one more chapter.

Why the hell would you do that?! Don't you believe in true love! God can't I even read it in stories now?! Where the hell else am I meant to find it?!

But hater, until the last 2 chapters I loved it.

This. I can't stop laughing. These moments are just... this is hilarious.

-cry cry cry cry-
BUT NICKY AND DAVE. THEY WERE SO PERFECT. WHYYYY.
Despite my utter despair, I did really like how you did this. A sadly happy ending. Those are always pretty nice.
I just wish that they hadn't broken up. I really was almost going to cry.
Damn. XD
Nathan 3

My my, you have piled on the drama, my friend. I like it. I can't stop reading.
Which is bad, because I've not slept this entire night/morning, and I'm starting to get a headache.
But hey. A good story is a good story, and I for one cannot put down a good book (even though this is a laptop.)
Nathan 3

... OH MY GOD I'M DYING OF CUTENESS. THIS IS PERFECT.
That is all.
Nathan 3

A very nice chapter! And may I break my formal shell for one moment to say this:
OH MY FUCKING GOD NICKY IS ADORABLE AS SHI I'm back. I'm very intrigued as to what will happen next. I'm wondering how (and if) Nicky and Dave will end up together. I'm wondering how Josh and Kay are reacting at home, how worried they are, etc.
To put that shortly, I'm very eager to read more. You did an exceptional job enticing the reader. Once I am finished with this story, you can count on me reading your other works. I can already tell this will be one of my favorite stories ever.
Keep up your good work, friend!
Nathan 3

That was a good opening; it gave you a nice warm welcome to Nicky's home environment and a good first impression of Nicky. I really like your writing style as well; very cohesive, and a healthy use of "big words", without overdoing it. Present-tense always draws me in, too; it makes the story come to life that much more, in my personal opinion. I also deeply appreciate that you don't have many grammatical or spelling errors, if any at all; a very hard-to-find quality when it comes to online writings.
Nothing I can complain about here. Nice work. I hope I see the same as I progress.
Nathan 3

... So... I really feel like I want to kill Nicky... What's with him and Dave breaking up? I don't like it. I'm sorry... I'm not a big fan of sad endings... :(

Still, the story's great The ending sucks, though, I'm honest with that TT

The bus scene made me laugh my ass off!
just sayin lol

Umm, I've liked the stories a lot so far, but the very end where it says "Dave is gone", he's just giving up? isn't that a little cold hearted of him?

Josh is very likeable :)

Very good story. I was quite impressed with it.

Did I miss something in this chapter or the ones following? Kay tells Josh to pack Mai's things because she can no longer stay but then it's not mentioned again in the next few chapters. Was Kay talking about not keeping her? And how has that not been discussed again? That fight between Kay and Josh seemed to end quickly without being discussed again. I was just wondering if I missed the part where they sorted this out?

awesome i loved this fic. there was times when i thought it was rushed in some places but you wrote the inner-workings of a teenage struggling with his sexuality really well.