i do things like this...just not as good.

i only found two things. first, i think the word you wanted for describing the landscape was barren, not baron, as i'm pretty sure that baron is a title, like duke or earl. secondly, and i'm not positive about this, but "Perhaps once they shined" doesn't feel quite right to me. i feel like 'perhaps they shone once' would be a slightly better use of the past tense. but that's all i have for constructive critiscm.

the emotion in this was incredibly clear, from her anger to her paranoia that someone would see her by the grave. good job.

I liked it. It's well written, and it expresses a lot of emotion. However, I would say that you need to edit this a bit more. For instance, the word is "barren," and after dialogue, you use commas, and don't capitalize the pronoun. But I digress. Great story, and congrats on your award

i liked that story... it was slightly creepy, but i liked it. and i liked how the gravestone lied, cause it's sort of like it says something, but it doesn't let you see the person behind it, you know?okies!ciao!:D

I can really see why you won something for this. It's really, really good. The only thing i would change is the very last thing she says. Maybe it would be appropiate to end it with another "i wonder why" question. I don't think your current ending really wraps it up...Great job!

Very well written.