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CiaoBellaxx 2007-04-26 ch 6,	abusethis is amazingly beautiful. so surreal, but everyone does have those moments in life where you just know that this is something completely different
whacked 2006-07-21 ch 6, anon.	abusei do believe that these little pieces truly highlight how much talent you hold. i adored each piece, its hard to pick a favourite but i think so far i have to for whatever reason that it touched me, be Prufrock's Nemesis. There was something in that piece that was different from the others. i will admit that there are people , as you already know, certain people who leave deep impressions on us, people with spark. That piece was like one of them. I think i didn't even get half of what was said in it but i got something (intangible as it was). From your other pieces i loved the phrase "teenage poerty" genius it is. Listening to REM's Daysleeper for some reason just happened to fit with all 6 of these pieces. I think what i love most about one shots (why i write only that and poetry) is that they can be so brilliant in achieving something that one more chapter could so easily destroy. Anyway..this is brilliant and i look forward to more pieces (hah i sound like a teacher or something!)
rrmehta364 2006-06-28 ch 6,	abuse"The wind fell silent, satisfied that he’d finally got a smile out of me, however determined I was to be miserable." : I liked that sentence. "It was there, though." : Don't think the comma is necessary. "almost as if love had tugged and pulled at him in affection." : Another awesome sentence. "she had been brimming with sadness, exuding melancholy" : I think this sentence would strike a stronger chord if some mention of the girl being sad in any way was mentioned. To be perfectly honest, I don't like the single tear. Its been used a lot, especially in very cliched moments (even though this isn't cliche) I like this a lot though. Very well written. Looking forward to reading more(sorry to fall behind) -bye.
special 2006-06-22 ch 3, anon.	abuseprecise, profound. In a word: beautiful. ;)allie P.S. sorry that my reviews are simply praise reviews. Perhaps constructive criticism is in order. Just wait 'til i find something to criticize. I'm sure there is, i'm just too caught up in the beauty of your words to find it. Maybe next time...? Sorry. ;)allie
special 2006-06-22 ch 2, anon.	abuselovely. ;)allie
LEDlorien7 2006-06-21 ch 6,	abusewow...once again I wonder if this actually happened. I love the way you convey an entire emotion in the description of a person. You did that in all of these. The first emotion was joy, then wonder, then defiance, then the change from sadness to happiness, and then sorrow. Or something like that. Anyway, i really like your butterflies, and i hope you continue it.
LEDlorien7 2006-06-21 ch 5,	abusewow, how pretty. I love how the two people are so mysterious. I don't know who they are, or what their relation is. This is like a snapshot of their life. A single moment, a thread from a tapestry. I really love these!
LEDlorien7 2006-06-21 ch 4,	abusewow, that's pretty cool. I love rain too, but i also, am afraid of lightning (me and my dog, we cower together) I once stood out in the rain until i was soaked: in a white t-shirt (it wasn't my fault i was wearing white). It was wonderfully cleansing. So, did this one ever happen? is it true?
pinkfairydust 2006-06-20 ch 6,	abusethis..as always..is confusing me...i really don't understand!
chaos called creation 2006-06-19 ch 6,	abuseHey ya Plinks :) I muchly enjoyed your one shots especially the last three. Your style seems to grow from one to the next which is especially encouraging to the rest of public as to remind us all that there's always room for improvement. I think Prufrock's Nemesis is probably my favourite since the setting is so unique and unexpected. Plus I wrote down bits and pieces of a storm poem today so maybe that's why.=]p I like the fifth one because it reminds me in one of the last scenes in the book Stargirl by Jerry Spinelli I always wondered about that 'hidden message' that the narrator never got to see and you wrote it in a way that was equally intriguing, so kudos. The sixth, oh the sixth...nicely written especially the ending because after reading it I just end up sitting and waiting, almost expecting something more and for someone to magically appear and tell me the rest of the story. Kind of like an unintentional cliffhanger. Or was it intentional? Hm... keep smilin'
skylines 2006-06-19 ch 6,	abuseThe things I want to say are beyond words, so I won't spoil this with my rambling. This was perfection, and I have this sort of satisfaction, of uncertain origin. This was lovely, and is going on my favourites. You deserve it.
Overwhelming Screams 2006-04-28 ch 3,	abusewow! this story's excellent so far, very mysterious and descriptive.
wolfeh 2006-04-24 ch 3,	abuse... wow. brilliant - though i prefer the "counting clouds" chappie. is it the same person? the same guy? wow. awesomeage. munchback hunky (1.58 in the pm)
wolfeh 2006-04-24 ch 2,	abuse... oh ... my ... giddy aunt. Awesome. I mean... I love the repetition of "different" though it changed slightly ... and ... this girl who's ... argh! I cant describe... stickin this on favs. reading onwards and sideways (1.55 in the pm)
wolfeh 2006-04-24 ch 1,	abuseWhen did you start this?? ACK. Sweet... and yet... true...and... I like it. Lots. Reading onwards and upwards...

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