so sad and so angsty!
I love it.
My favorite line was the last:
"its no great surprise
that generations down the line
aren't ever going to have my eyes."
Good job! Keep it up.
[s-s-softersin]

I'll admit that I wasn't overly awed by this the first time I read it through, but then I read it out loud and the flow was just awesome. I mean, I could see how the lines fit together and how everything was meant to be there. That's nice. I think some of the ideas might be a little cliche or abstract, but the flow of this made it a good piece. Keep writing! :)

natrual selection is a scary thing out of context and is the basis for social darwinism. Go for flying spaghetti monsterism. This be oozing angst.

Excellent ending; sarcastic, cynical, and definitely an understatement. It really highlighted the voice of the poem. Great job, m'lass.

Intense. It really built up, and in my mind the tempo increased, only for an anticlimactic ending, but that seemed to suit this poem.

marie

Aww. This poem is so freaking sad it's almost pitiful. The last line of this had a sad-little-puppy-dog effect on me. I seriously went "aww, poor thing."

[well im stuck in the mind ive always had / in a life I don't deserve.] Great line(s). Very powerful.

Stanza 2 is perfect. As is stanza 3. As is stanza 4. Heck, the whole poem is perfect. I'm not sure which stanza is my favorite. Possibly stanza 2.

I really like the parenthesis part in stanza 3. Very effective.

The last stanza is one of the saddest things I've ever read. It's incredibly emotional; it tugged at my heart.

Excellent poem. Much better than the first one. It's powerful, emotional, and even thought-provoking. Great job. You're extremely talented.

This poem is a bit more abstract than your others I've read tonight. Though abstract isn't really a good word to use, because this poem is still blunt and honest and doesn't tiptoe around anything. I really like the costume part in the first stanza, as well as the whole second stanza. What really stood out in this poem was the excellent rhythm; that's something I haven't really noticed in the others.

LOVE this. can relate. v v good. great concept. byootiful.

Quite thought-provoking... I'm envious of how you were able to make something like a "theory" so poetic. - ADD-san

Hmm. I actually think your theory has something going for it, though I wish I could disagree. It might jsut be I like the poem.

No. If suicide was natural selection, why do all the artists die? or perhaps we have a god who hates the artsy...

Yes. I agree with it.

God I'm disjointed. I quite like this. its made me think.

i didnt review this? woah. im pretty sure i read it before. this is awesome. love 'only the strongest ( the prettiest)the fastest ( the thinnest)' awesome job with this.

less abstract than most of your poems.. I like it a lot though.. its interesting concept and it definately made me think

i like that ending... I liek the costume thing too

That is so sad. I love the costume metaphor. Great piece.

both of them just chill you and leave you breathless, wanting and waiting to breath but you are chocked by tears. love it.

~* noelle