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| p0kesy 2006-07-14 ch 1, | "She is annoying" i agree with this. the writing is so... dramatic. there's no point in it being so full of such strong words;;even the emo/suicidal onesdon't write like this... drama queen/king... |
| The Astronaut 2006-04-22 ch 1, | "That she must carry alone with pain around her heart tightening." What the bloody hell does this mean? As I have said before, your writing makes utterly no sense, and not in a good way, either. You're too melodramatic in your writing, too. Also, you heap on the "emo" and the "suicidal tendancies to look cool" thing, and it really does not work. If you're writing things like this, you are obviously just some poor little girl/boy (I'm not quite sure which you are) who is striving for attention because you don't want to admit you're a typical teenager. In other words, shut up and realize yourself. |
| LightFlyer 2006-04-18 ch 1, | Very well written. |