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| oops, heartbreak 2006-04-19 ch 1,  | abuseIt's so cute. Seriously. Maybe a tad stalkerish, but if that boy doesn't like that girl back, I'm going to be a bit upset. |
| CakeForEveryone 2006-04-18 ch 1, | abusewow, that was good, yes a bit stalkerish, it kind of reminds me of my friend Rudy who likes this guy and got all his info (address,number,ID) the only difference is that he doesn't stalk him he just talks about him almost every second, any ways I'm gonna show him this poem, I loved it! |
| aaidenkae 2006-04-18 ch 1, | abusevery nice. *laughs* yes a bit starker-ish. one line "Wiping the sweat from my palms unto my jeans" would probably read better "wiping the sweat from my palms on my jeans." but no big deal. one preposition. thank you.-kae |
| hey maria 2006-04-18 ch 1, | abuseYes, stalkerish, but I like it. It's oddly endearing. And...weird. I do like the description of shaky hands, unsteady heartbeats, etc, the general nervousness. It was well-written...great job. :) |