I really like this story...it's really thought-provoking. I don't think it is offensive...but you get your point across just the same.

Liz-Beth,I think that the message is very good in this piece of writing. At the beginning I thought the girl would kill herself! Then, as she seemed to calm down, I was like, *sigh* I can really tell that one of the girl's favorite places is to be there by the river. I don't know if that's what you were trying to state, but that's how it seemed.

I really like it! I think it captures the feeling of most anger.