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| slightlyaddictedx3 2008-03-10 ch 23,  | abusei love this story ;] plus the classical cliche ending(= |
| Gentle. Edge. 2007-12-31 ch 2, | abuseThe beginning was a bit wordy for me, but it did say a lot. Interesting first chapter and nice development for the characters. |
| mememe 2007-10-13 ch 9, anon. | abusehey wazzup. i'm up to chapter 9 dudeman... you know who i am hahaha - fellow P-plate stealer... almost. |
| Rory Gilroy 2007-06-24 ch 5, | abuseHAH. HER NAME IS CHASTITY?? THAT'S A WALKING OXYMORON!! |
| xoxluurve 2007-04-09 ch 8, | abusecute. though there was more talking than actions in this. xD Chloe is really nosey, though. -sigh- xP onto the next chapter. . . |
| ice-cold-pepsi 2007-01-07 ch 23, | abuseI wood hv loved the nedin 2b longer coz wen it finished i was just lyk..WOW! It was a lil abrupt 2 me but either way, i loved it. |
| diamondewdrops 2006-12-03 ch 16, | abuseok. so i was wrong about jason... >.> sorry jason ^_^ you got cheated on multiple times... and wow, all of the girls in chloe's life seem to backstab her while all of the guys in her life fall for her...hahah it must be animal magnetism or something like that.. |
| diamondewdrops 2006-12-03 ch 8, | abuseugh. i dont like jace. he gives me evil vibes. maybe he wont, but i think he's a player and will therefore cheat on her or play her or something...i think that chloe is pretty, but not gorgeous...if he could go out with someone like chastity, i doubt he would go out with chloe, even though he does seem pretty nice...sometimes. |
| catlover 2006-11-17 ch 1, anon. | abusei love ur story. ur style of writing is amazing coz u make a person feel as if their rite there. thats quite a talent. reading this story was a pleasure. |
| Deafgurl's world 2006-11-16 ch 23, | abusehey. I glad Jonah and Chloe were end up together in end. I glad it turn out was happily ever after for them. Your story was so good :) |
| blitz_star12@hotmail.com 2006-09-15 ch 23, anon. | abuseFirstly i would like to say: well done.But throughout the whole story i felt so argh with chloe. She's so self pitying and there's so much drama in one story. I think the thing i hate the most is how Jonah suddenly started liking her... and then how in this chapter he ignores her, but suddenly when she says i love you, he loves her too...what about his girlfriend? There's so much cheating in this story. It's not nice to read about. |
| Strangely Natural 2006-09-11 ch 23, | abuseSurprisingly amazing is all I can say. This would make one heck of a movie in my opinion. This was genuinely a good, realistic yet feel good story. The self-doubt did get a bit overbearing at times but doesn't it always? especially when one's a teenager. I commend you on your creation, truly great! |
| TheGreatSorceressRheaa 2006-09-10 ch 23, | abuseWHAAT! THIS CAN'T BE THE LAST CHAPTER! YOU CAN'T JUST LEAVE IT THERE! WHY DO YOU TORMENT ME! I NEVER DID ANYTHING TO YOU! That was so great! I loved it! As you can see above ^ If you added an epologue, I would love you forevers. *puppy-dog eyes* pwease. |
| ash 2006-09-09 ch 5, anon. | abuseI just started reading this story now and I'm only on chapter five, but it's really good.However, I'm going to give you some constructive criticism and say that you might want to look into getting a beta reader. There are a lot of spelling and grammar errors, and there are parts of the story that make absolutely no sense.Don't take it the wrong way, though; I really do like the story! :] |
| alexa 2006-09-09 ch 23, anon. | abuseumm.. what?? that was a bit..sudden, to say the least. this wasn't a very developed or good ending for the story. |