Im slightly disappointed... I know you wanted to go the realistic route - but I still wanted them to - be together! this story has left me a bitter feeling.

Ahhhhh This is such a wonderful ending to a wonderful story. You really developed both Chris and Warren well - I hated Chris in the beginning but really felt sorry for him at the end. I guess it should be obvious that he is now my favourite character. :) Great job!

THIS WAS GOOD. DISTURBINGLY SO. MADDENINGLY SO.
This has been an absolute angst galore. I simply drowned in it. The characters changed and grew-devolved and evolved. I loved Victoria. She was lovely. The story moved on and was layered. Your writing style was excellent... But certain aspects of this seemed contrived. Would Chris' confidence die away that quickly? A man so egotistical that he was sure his 'lover' would stay with him after getting his infidelity rubbed into his face- dissolved into a subdued, thoughtful, loving person. Seemed slightly rushed. And Warren became confident preeeeetty quickly.

But the main thing that's bothering me is that I can't forgive both Chris and Warren: the rape situation did not redeem Chris, but it did made Warren appear 'worse'. Chris had emotionally abused Warren for 6 years, playing on his desperation (refer to the start, where he says something like 'a desperate Warren was a horny Warren'. Manipulative. A supreme bastard.
But Warren's also a victim and offender. Warren had abused an inebriated Chris. Also a manipulative, supreme bastard. You CAN'T say that it's an eye for an eye though. Or that the equality scales are tipped differently now... You sort of implied that in your author's notes. I believe that both Chris and Warren are simply both 'immoral', or WERE both immoral. I'm glad that you made them realize their mistakes.

Also: The ending. I sort of knew Chris and Warren weren't going to end up together-too many holes and strains in their relationship. But the ending was sort of abrupt. Chris somehow ended up with a new guy and Warren just took the 'leftovers'. Chris seemed satisfied, but Warren didn't sound like he was... I wished you developed Jake more. He just seemed supportive of Warren. Not much else.

Anyways, THANKYOU for writing this story. IT WAS AWESOME. AMAZING. AND DESPITE SOME STUFF (minor titbits) I STILL LOVED IT! YOU DESERVE HEAPS OF LOVE AND HUGS.

love 3,
reader :)

I really enjoyed this story. It was so emotional and dramatic. My only problem was that the relationship between Sam and Chris wasn't really that in depth. I never got the feeling that Chris's feelings for Sam were anywhere near his feelings for Warren. It it ended in a real life way instead of giving me "true love forever" closure I wanted for the characters. However, I'm one of those people who always wants unrealistically happy endings and I must admit this story is awesome;)

Hi,

Glad to read you're back. I hope it sticks.

I know how it is when stuff gets in the way of writing, I can't seem to finish my own. I hope you're not a teenager though, because that would suck.

Either way, I liked reading this one. I figured from the second "date" that Jake was in love with Warren.

When Warren first slept with David, I also kinda knew that he and Chris wouldn't be back together. I kinda hoped they did since they seemed to belong together, but I guess too much baggage would most likely destroy them.

From my point of view, there will always be something special between them, like a special connection, a love that still lives hidden under all those layers of their heart. But can't be. They have great men beside them that don't deserve to be let go.

I'm waiting for the Zercan thing to continue. Hope you have time and inspiration for it. I want to know what will happen with Parisa. It must be lonely, to be beautiful but not having a mate. And seeing so many great men, fall in love with them, but knowing that they are not the destined mate.

Good luck with everything.

Hugs,

P.

;")

Towards the middle of the story the characters changed so much that the only similarity were the names. It was too much. Warren's ending, in my opinion, was sucky. Yeah he got with Jake, but it was seemed like he just went with it because Jake wanted to and he was like 'eh why not'. In the first few chapters you build Warren up so much, the readers were all like Team Warren. Then out of no where you went Team Chris. It was sorta weird. I wanted to see more for Warren like watch his confidence grow and him become a better person but not lose himself completely. Instead he became this promiscuous asshole who almost kinda rapes people and then dates this guy at the last minute in whom he showed no real previous interest in. Chris gets his whole life turned around and becomes this great guy and moves in with this other great guy. It just seemed rushed and a little unbelievable. Hope you get a chance to rewrite it has potential to be great!

Hmmm author ... -.- lols 'rape' is a strong word. Quite frankly Chris said he wanted it, and well he did. Let me make it clear I do not condone rape in fact I view it on the same level as murder and think it should be treated just as harshly. But I just can't find it in me to feel sorry for that son of a b***h.

Wow their priorties are really messed being treated like piece of trash like Warren was, for six frickn years is way worse then a 'little' vindictive rage. It's not like he has done anything bad, seriously bad, you just can't compare that. I love how they think their the ones being wrong *giggles*.

Chris really needs to back off. Warren doesn't deserve that, Chris doesn't even realize what he did he seduced him took his virginity then he got engaged, then he slept with other people! Really, just because Warren is living it up does not mean he is a prick like Chris.

Stay away Chris -.-!Warren deserves better. Chris can't say he is that great of a guy he is pratically a Draco.

I don't like how the story ended ):

I was hoping Chris and Warren would get back together... It kinda seems that all the things Chris did to Warren and the whole story progression was for nothing .

idk, maybe it's just me. Oh, well, you're the author, t's up to you ;)

i'm sooo glad they didn't get back together! it would've been a disaster p though i was very disapointed with warren for doing that,not that chris didn't deserve it, but warren didn't deserve turning into such an asshole! but revenge is SWEET ;)

I liked most of this! The whole role reversal was really interesting.

It was fun to see Warren transform from somebody that was so scarred by what Chris did to somebody confident. And it was sad to see him keep on tumbling down to so low and not realize it until the end. Maybe he'll eventually be the same Warren that most people loved in the beginning but with just a bit more confidence.

Moving on to Chris, I actually like him. Sure he was an ass at the start and calling him a maggot would be an insult to maggots but he truly did transform into a good person. It does not what he did to Warren isn't as bad as it was before but he is trying to be a better person. And if you can't change the past, might as well do something good in the present, right? Some people think he is whiny but he just feels guilty about how he treated Warren (as he should be).

I also liked most of your characters except Chris' and Vic's family and Jake. Chris' and Vic's family is a no brainer. With Jake, I don't know. I just got more and more annoyed with him as he continued to justify Warren's actions just because he has a crush on him. I mean seriously, if all the guy does is suck up then he's not really good for Warren. That was why when Chris said that Warren was in a relationship he always wanted I kinda felt sorry for Warren. He just moved from one end of the spectrum to the other (being completely ignored to someone who might as well be a dog). Maybe I'm being to harsh on Jake but I don't see them living happily ever after. I'd comment on Chris and Sam's relationship as well but there wasn't really much there.

Anyway, as a whole it was good, the ending was kinda blah, and I have some strong opinions that do not really matter in between. I'm off to your next story.

In advance, I would like to apologize for leaving this criticism without a means for you to contact me back. Sorry, but I just do not have an account for this site. However, since this story was written a few years ago, I'd be surprised if you gave this review the time of day at all.

Firstly, I would like to compliment you on your writing skills. This concept of this story is interesting and what I have read so far kept me intrigued. However, I want to address why I've stopped reading this story and will most likely not continue it:

1. The transformations of Chris and Warren, specifically Chris. While the idea of the reversal of roles is a great one, I feel as if this could have been executed much better. Initially, Chris is presented as a heartless bastard who cheats on his boyfriend with his girlfriend (and vice versa), manipulates said boyfriend until he's nothing more than a timid puppet, and is basically a cocky sonofabitch. His transformation into a lovesick puppy is quite unbelievable, especially because of his carefree, confident to the point of arrogant nature. A realization of love may quell that arrogance, humble, and cause a person to think more about the welfare of others, but the sudden lack of confidence and an injection of demureness is not plausible. In that short amount of time, a personality like Chris' could not have possibly one-eightied as it did without some kind of mistake or transitional period in which his previous behavior was repeated or rehashed in some way and not just built up as guilt, woe, and self-loathing. Jackasses don't work like that; there would be a relapse.

However, Chris' reaction to seeing Warren's happiness with his new friends is believable, so I forgive what I believe to be his uncharacteristic hopelessness for that factor.

As for Warren's transformation; his was a lot more believable, but I think it was a bit rushed. Someone that shy and lacking in self-esteem would probably need more than a couple of months to be pulled out of his shell, even if the epiphany of his sexiness builds his ego. I forgive this point merely because of Jake's encouraging character being a major factor in the quick blooming of Warren's new personality.

2. The argument of who wronged who the most. Chris was a horrible boyfriend, yes. Warren took advantage of a drunk man, yes. And a sin is a sin is a sin. In no way do I mean that each man's transgression cancelled one another out, but neither transgression was worse than the other. They were both violations of a person; one was physical and the other was mental. Warren's actions can be interpreted as rape, which is a horrible form of abuse. However, Warren and Chris' relationship was another example of abuse. As I stated before, Chris was a jackass and nothing about his initial character - a figure that cheated on, lied to, and manipulated his boyfriend - seemed to be above having sex with a person just because they were drunk should the opportunity arise. You indicated no such morality into his initial characterization. In fact, I recall a passage early on in which Chris enjoyed the thought of making Warren so desperate that he could prey on him for sex because when a desperate Warren was a horny Warren. That passage alone made me despise his character and it made it very difficult for me to fully support the redeeming of his character. In my opinion, manipulating one's lover into sex through such negative means can be equated to physical rape; both leave behind MASSIVE mental scars. Nevertheless, it is just as hard for me to forgive Warren's actions as it is for me to forgive Chris'.

The warring of which wrong was worse also bothered me because I felt that Warren's act of raping Chris (I use this phrase because Chris' actions were manipulated by the alcohol just as Warren's actions were manipulated by Chris) served as a deus ex machina to quickly redeem Chris' character because without this scene, Chris still would have been the biggest asshole because of his cheating. In fact, the scene in which Lauren visited Warren after the incident made this most apparent to me since she asked him if Chris ever sunk as low as to sleep with him when he was drunk. Two problems with this: does timid Warren even get drunk and what traits of pre- Redeemed!Chris pointed to him being above such actions? At the end of the conversation, Lauren also points out to Warren that it was his fault for staying in the relationship with Chris as long as he did. I STRONGLY disagree. That relationship was abusive - not physically or even verbally, but emotionally abusive. Chris was manipulative to the point that Warren and his sister knew that any breakups could only be successfully executed if they were made in public places and even then, Warren had to move to another state and change all his personal contacts in order to end it all. Just because he never got a black eye does not mean that Warren did not have the same unhealthy dependencies that victims of abuse exhibit. Lauren's statement was wrong and actually disproved because Warren managed to get strong enough to get away which was not an easy task.

3. Chapter 30's Author's Note. You alienated the opinions of many of your readers with this statement. Perhaps, instead of hammering your opinion of how the story and its character should have been interpreted, you could go back over your work and get to the bottom of why readers are interpreting the story in a different way than which you intended. The review section is not just for compliments and spelling/grammar checks, it is a catalyst for critiques of your work, so one should not be surprised or offended when another has different opinions than they do.

As I stated before, I did enjoy what I DID read and I hope that you continue to write.

- Jackie, 4th year English major at The Ohio State University (Please do not attribute any of this rushed review's grammar errors to our English department.)