 KASoroka 2006-04-20 . chapter 1nicely done, but i would suggest changing the word " night" on one of the two lines where you repeate the rhyming word
" so black against the night
No cars, no roads, no city lights,
just you and the darkness of night"
( ex. just you and the darkness in sight)
Also it is correct in poetry to capitalize the first letter in each line.
either way, i enjoyed reading this poem =) Nicely done. |