NO. OHMYGOD. NO. You cannot abandon this story. I will SWIM all the way to the Phillipines- on the back of a man-eating shark- and eat your head if you abandon this. Oh my goodness.

Okay, well, I won't do that as man-eating sharks are hard to come by, but STILL! After you left it at such a...sort-of-ish cliffhanger thing where we're wondering if Lesser did see the fight or not and what did she think about it and oh my gosh. T-T

Well, but I do understand your reasons for dropping this, but still. This, this makes me very very sad, as this really was one of my most favoritest stories up on FP EVER. It really blew me away when I read it. Sigh...

I love the revisions and I'd leave a more coherent review if my brain weren't so dead.

Haha, you know me!

Ow. Poor Silver. That has GOT to suck big time. Oh, and nothing is really confusing me, like, there's no part of the plot I don't get, but it's still a little blurry. Not in a bad way, though, if that makes any sense.

Oh, and by the way, I loved your alternate version of this chapter. Funny funny.

Shock and horror. Poor Silver! Why won't Lesser come to him?

It's so sad; I did think he was going to win. The dogs were really very sick. Oh, please, let Lesser come and make it all better.

Wow! I'm very very impressed...your writing is absolutely beautiful. Kind of weird- sometimes I'm not really sure what's going on- but it's just great to read. Your descriptions are often dead-on and I couldn't explain why. Poor Lesser, though...and Poliloa is just...creepy. Anyway, great job so far.

Woot! Do I HAVE to review each and every chappie again? Wah!

Indeed. WHAT A SPOILER that summary is! Haha!

M...Hehe. Interesting choice of nick. Will be finishing story when I get the time...meanwhile, keep on writing! ^-^

Hello! I got here through Lack Thereof, who said you are good and have too many shadow readers, and I am glad I did, because your writing style is so new and lovely and amazing, and I love your pretty dreamdelusionworld and the people in it, and who could not love Silver? And it wasn't a boring fight scene, not boring at all; so you must finish it, yes? Forgive me if I sound incoherent, it is the effect of your dazzling piece.

I just read your freaking summary. It was hilarious. You...fishy-fish, you!

Err...now that I've read that, the mood I was in for reviewing this chapter is totally ruined. RUINED! I was going to talk about how touching Silver's ramble about their life before he gave Lesser away was; that the fact that he'd dance JUST so a bum would give his child ** to eat nearly brought tears to my eyes.

Of course, now I'm reduced to merely shaking my head in amusement over your summary. Silly, silly, silly. But BETTER than your last one. Your last one made me sad! I mean, people aren't going to flock to your story unless you have a good summary up. Which you do now, of course. "Sex" is a magic word, you know!

I like Lattu. He seems like the only nice person Silver's ever- err, stayed with. Were they sleep-together boyfriends or just friends? I would assume the former, as Silver seems to sleep with, well, everyone, but it feels like there was a different quality to Silver's relationship with Lattu. Like how Lattu would play with Lesser, and stuff.

(sighs) Yeah, so I think THIS ones my favorite chapter. It was really moving. The way you suddenly shift gears from silly and comical (the thing about Silver freaking out the maids for fun was great) to wistful and sad is quite artful.

That's all I can think of to say...sorry if some parts of my reviews aren't coherent; I'm trying to whip them up fast so I can get to as many chapters as I can. ^_^

I love this chapter. Prolly one of my favorite ones in the story, and that's saying a lot. Poliloa is just gross and insane and mysterious and awesomely, awesomely cool at the same time. The abruptness of the straightjacket is always something that takes me aback, even though you already mentioned it a chapter or two ago (it gave me a start then, too- the way you suddenly slip in bits of startling info like that is just GOOD).

I get the feeling that when Poliloa was young, she must have been really beautiful or something.

This part was somehow sad. "He busied himself with eye-paint once more. 'I’m voting we stay here and I go on whoring for Giollaen and his mother.'" It was like Lesser was playfully dreaming about spinning a different life together at first, but Silver shot it down. The fact that he was just sort of poking fun at it (the toilet thing, haha) made it seem as if he knew that such fantasies were basically worthless. I guess that's what made it sad. XD I read way too much into these things, don't I?

Heh. Giollaen has some stupid, annoying friends- but I like the contrast you've painted between Ordinary People like them and people like Silver and Lesser. Those two really are something, ain't they?

And I like that Silver has such, y'know, loyalty to his daughter. At first you might think that he'd be more of the type who'd be nice to her when they're alone, but when he's in front of his friends he'd just be kind of ashamed of her and ignore her and humor other people when they say cutting things and then not think about it at all- but he's not like that, which increases his likable-ness.

And it's a much stronger hint to his underlying sensitivity than anything else at this point in the story. I mean, we've already seen that Lesser loved her dad with an "obsessive, blind" love, but now that side of Silver is starting to manifest itself as well.

There are a few small typos here and there in the story...I don't remember a lot, but I recall spotting a scanty few when I read this before (though bear in mind that I've read your story over several times by now; I like it that much). The only one I could spot in this chapter was "The continued with sweet, mindless prattle for quite a while."

I think I started liking Lesser after this line: "I never liked MEETING them. I might approve of them on principle, though." It conveys a sense of humor about her, and also makes her seem a bit like a mother-figure here. you know, always looking out after her papa, fussing over him and such. : )

You combined it into two chapters, eh? Hmm...good way to save submission time, that. I liked it a bit better when it was one, though, but either way this is a great way to start off the story.

Ah, I remember when I first read this. I was like, "Wait, why would this dude be flirting with someone young enough to be his grandkid? Wouldn't she be grossed out or something? Maybe he's just a really studly old man...still, ew...(I didn't know he was still young-n- lurvely back then)...ohh, pretty writing style...ah, so he gave birth to his- wait, WHAT? ! ?

That did it. Whether the story turned out bad or good, immoral or chaste, interesting or not, I was hooked from that line on. M-Preg does that to ya, if only from the weirdness. But due to, you know, a male being pregnant, I was kinda expecting the story to go a bit downhill from there. But it didn't- it got even better. Even Silver's giving birth to his daughter seemed- good! Weird, but good. Fascinating, you know? Although, since I read this first chapter, I have been dying to know, "What hole did she come out of?" ...Of course, I dare not ask. But i'm not worried by now, either; I'm positive you've come up with something making a magical sort of sense.

For some random reason, I thought that there would be a statue in the lake, of two people. I thought that was what "the two people in the lake" were. I have NO idea why (those two people were the reflections, right?) but I did. The way you described the lake was beautiful, by the way. The imagery, and the way you wove it in amongst Lesser and Silver's action and interactions. That way, there was enough of it to paint a lovely picture, but not drowning in detail.