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auburn-haired-sadist-XD 2008-11-15 ch 3,	Wow, talk about a ** night. XD
moneymakestheworldgoround 2007-10-10 ch 23,	eh? christine? didn't she die ... like at the very beginning ... or is dis a different one? hm
moneymakestheworldgoround 2007-10-10 ch 22,	:) corny? i love corniness. :) so yeah, it was a bit corny. ... why is corny a word so similar to corn when they have nothing in common?? hm ...
Genesis Goma 2007-05-08 ch 23,	That was so good. Your writing is not the least bit corny and very enjoyable. Please hurry and write more, I can't wait!
Sour Lullaby 2007-01-30 ch 23,	Okay, so I finally re-found this story again. I used to read it but then lost track of it and, well, now I'm back again. It's a great story - great sense of character and great plotline - but it's severely lacking in a good summary. I honestly believe you could double the number of your reviews if you switched the summary to something longer and more particular to your story. Lots of stories have vampires, love, and blackmail in them, so tell the readers why your story is different from the rest! Just some friendly advice. The story's going well and you don't have to take my advice if you don't want to, but I felt the urge to tell you this. VD
Emmaee 2006-12-12 ch 23,	hey loved it i hate to review before i finish a story. its not the best encouragement but i just read everything so far in one block and holy crap this is such a good story. lol keep writing cause you have heaps of good ideas and your writng style is really nice. keep up the good work.
Alteng 2006-12-08 ch 23,	Well, I did rather need a brown bag for Mia and Phyconos. I did like that line about her wanting to tear some human's throat out for blood. I have never written a turned vampire in that manner. His return line was good for a response. Ah, but Galvin would have been such a proper vampire slave to Dartagnion. Drain his still living blood and take his heart, like the wives. I have a blood licking scen coming up in the Bane of Rendsberg Part IV, and it is neither one of hte vampires!
Alteng 2006-11-30 ch 22,	Fictionpress was not sending emails for awhile, and the box is full again! I will have to see about reading the other story. As for the chapter. Hey, I'm not much on the romantic type. I think that the couple needed to have a little more of an argument about the bit thing, or at least Phynonos would have to think about how much easier things would be if she was a vampire. Oh, Galvin missed the obvious bit about the vampire in the house. "We know he's in there, because we saw him flying about your window!" ir some whatnot like that. Oh, and now, Dartangion has nothing on Phyconos. The girl has been bitten. Of course, this is all out in the open anyway. And I saw that coming on Dartangion. He is going to have to show up later all bedraggled from the encounter with the mob.
chelsea 2006-11-10 ch 21,	you have such a wonderful story going here! i'm absolutely enthralled with the characters. write more soon, please!
sarah 2006-09-10 ch 21,	oh no- i hope dartanion doesnt hurt mia-I truly love this story-please update soon!
Alteng 2006-09-05 ch 21,	Okay, it has been awhile. I got kind of bogged down, and having a summer vacation does nothing to hekp clean out the emails! Dark is an obnoxious little piece, indeed. I have a character like that, who will show up in Part V of Bane of Rendsberg. They do have their uses. In a way, he is sweet, and he is a good kick in the rump to Phyconos. You know, the vampires look like a bunch of wusses, because they will not honor the pact with the Hariantons. I think that the Hariantons needs to kick some vampire butt for that as well. Kyros has issues, too, for letting Dartangion get away, mind you. I look for him to be drawn and quartered and other fun stuff done to him before long. Not to mention, when the Hariatons get done with their little problem, he's likely to get it from them as well. How many times can you kill a vampire?
Macy Verdie 2006-07-24 ch 20,	You know I LOVE this story! I also like the Marik and Verdie story we are rpging on the website... YAY! Dark is coming soon...he is such a cute caring little boy...oops...ignore that! Little Lottie
Alteng 2006-07-01 ch 20,	Yes, Sesshy is most definately cool! InuYasha could never aspire to that height! I saw the third movie as well. Okay, I actually rememeber that there is an underlying plot going on here. It has to do with the sorcerors that the vampires weren't suppose to bite, but Dartangion did one. (That sounds kinky!) Ah, Phyconos could go ahead and expose him, and I don't think that he would care that Dartanion would expose him back. What is the use of his life anyway. Ah, and Mia has a very big mouth, and she forgot to point out that the vampire is under her control because of the crystal, but somehow I figure that Galvin is going to be doing some vampire hunting.
Alteng 2006-06-30 ch 19,	Ah, that old line about No Beauty without danger, which is an Einsturzende Neubauten song called "Keine Schonheit ohne Gefahr", that has a musical passage in it that sounds remarkably like the a musical passage in the 1979 version of Nosferatu. Now that you are totally confused by that antidote, it is time to move on about the chapter. Hey, making Phyconos confess his love through the charm of the crystal is cheating, but it works. The bit about the vampire biting the person he loves to show his affection was a nice bit. I did that in Travellers as well. That was a truely twisted things, too, mind you. Oh, and being cruel to characters is fun!! You haven't began to see how cruel I can be to Lucifer and Alteng! I told one of my readers that there are crueler things to do to characters than killing them off, adn Alteng certainly has a nasty destiny ahead of him. Oh, and have you seen the second movie for Inu Yasha. It makes you wonder why Kagome keeps the beads on Inu Yasha.
Alteng 2006-06-30 ch 18,	Gee, I was the only one with questions. Pain in the butt, aren't I!There are different stories with vampires drinking other vampires' blood. I read a couple of stories based off of the Masquerade game that did that, but I would think that the blood would be a bit on the used side, if you get my meaning . . . Anyway, as to the new chapter. Gee! That was awfully cheeky of Galvin to just walk in on Mia's house, but he did recover well. Yeah, I can see where he would have to come in to investigate to see if she was alright, especially when there are creatures a bit long of tooth with a blood fetish running about. That was sweet with the shopping trip, and boy, Phyconos must have been really out of it. His cheeks would be amazing colors of red if he caught her measuring his naked body . . . (and were other things measured as well! Naughty, naughty!)

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