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| saccharine lust aerial 2007-10-18 ch 1,   | This is really good... me likey! |
| Yeeger 2007-01-15 ch 1, | I love this poem- it's so powerful! There's really nothing more I can say. Never have I seen italics used so skillfully. ~Yeeger |
| eraced 2006-10-20 ch 1, | wow! that was dark and beautiful. keep writing. sugar and ice. ~erAced~ |
| lilyqueen777 2006-10-20 ch 1, | i simply love it. wonderfully written and i love the word choice, and the italics. made the whole poem powerful, and the message is there. im adding to my c2 and fav. list! |
| DansMandy 2006-09-12 ch 1, | wow, kinda sounds like a lil whore. lmao. But good work. |
| Crazy.Until.Proven.Otherwis... 2006-08-31 ch 1, | Wow. That was so beautiful. Telling the story of what so many girls have to do just to get by. Wow. The rhyme was good, just a few times I think you over did it with the syllables, but it's cool otherwise. 'She cries lemon drop tears', I love that line. It just paints pictures. |
| Karine Dragon'sheart 2006-08-30 ch 1, | *cries* This is so good...so absolutely heart-wrenching... Laters, KD |
| Let It Rain 2006-07-15 ch 1, | Hm. . . I like this alot. At times it didn't flow well, but hey. Still a good poem. I wrote a piece about the same topic (or close enough) once. Anyway, write on! |
| Lilac Ebony 2006-06-26 ch 1, | I like all the descriptions. And the poem makes me feel some what sad for the girls who have to do that. Anyways i think you might like my poems Green Eyes, and Caramel. So if you could check them out that would be great. |
| Katterree Fengari 2006-06-11 ch 1, | lovely...something in every stanza...Nice poem. You have a typo in the line "Shewas a gummy bear princess" |
| JackpotSpider 2006-04-29 ch 1, | This reminded me of the book 'Candy' by Kevin Brooks or something like that, you should go read it if you haven't already and you'll be amazed on how well you pegged the main character...who's name is Candy haha alright, keep up the good work! |
| Morwain 2006-04-26 ch 1, | this was good really it was i like |
| Kat 2006-04-26 ch 1, | i loved it...*sigh* i love the way u play with words...this one made me cry...i don't know y really..ttyl all my loveKat |
| addie pray 2006-04-26 ch 1, | Nice. The first part reminded me of Garbage's "Cherry Lips". |
| Steppenwoelfin 2006-04-21 ch 1, | Wonderful poem - you use so many sweet "candy" terms which contrast and yet blend perfectly with the bitterness and harshness of the topic. Very original. |