Reviews for Under the Blue Sky, Sinfully

Reviews For: Under the Blue Sky, Sinfully - Reviews: Page 1 of 11

merrymowmow 2007-11-04 ch 58,	I was wondering when you're going to update?
Chocolate Ninj4 2007-08-04 ch 57,	Good chapter. I'm sorry my reviews are being particularly short, but I haven't really felt like writing reviews, but I did want to read the chapters (in Pain, too) and let you know that I have. The stories are going very well, and all I want to do with them right now is read. =)
Chocolate Ninj4 2007-08-04 ch 56,	That magical mouth stuff was just weird.
Chinese Dragon Keeper 2007-08-02 ch 56,	I loved this chappie too. Lots of action and surprises for me. I did not expect Maxie to tell Kaoru he was in love with him. I kinda feel bad for Chris...so update soon, please!
Chocolate Ninj4 2007-07-15 ch 54,	This is one of those chapters that I can see as a scene from a movie. Possibly just because it reminds me of a lot of scenes from a lot of movies, with the "keep going, don't worry about me" thing, and the stopping in the middle of all the action to have a touching moment, kiss, etc. =P The one criticism I have is how in the last part you say that what was happening was "symbolic" and "a metaphor." If that is so, let the reader figure it out for him/herself, and just give a nudge, such as "The group looked back at the tower and thought about how all their work seemed fruitless." Overall, however, it was a very good chapter, and a great end to the section.
Chocolate Ninj4 2007-07-15 ch 53,	I liked this chapter a lot more than the previous one. It's a better chapter. It could probably be combined with the last chapter, though, but that's OK, because I appreciate how you wanted to have an even number of chapters for the first part. =P This chapter did a good job explaining things for the reader, such as the Blind Room, as well as setting up the whole Life/Love/Hate/Death thing.
Chocolate Ninj4 2007-07-15 ch 52,	Flashback. I like it. It works much better in this case to tell what happened in the past than characters in the present revealing it. This chapter does suffer from some of the stiff dialog that was present a few chapters ago and had gone away in the past couple chapters, though.
Chocolate Ninj4 2007-07-15 ch 51,	Good chapter. Lots of action. ^^ Oh, and why does Chris have to be clothed?
Chocolate Ninj4 2007-07-15 ch 50,	You had to get the sin in there somewhere. =P I'm curious to why the solidified magic is called "The Sin," though. What's so sinful about it? I'm sure I'll find out. Hopefully in the next few chapters that I'm about to read...
Chinese Dragon Keeper 2007-07-03 ch 51,	Ooh, your story is awesome. So much yaoi and action, it's really great to read. I'm especially impressed how detailed your story is, your writing is so amazing. Keep writing!
Chocolate Ninj4 2007-06-30 ch 49,	This was a good chapter. I liked the focus on Mandy (especially with the title) and the development of her situation and feelings while still talking about the other characters and what was going on around Mandy. I could see this chapter as if it were a scene in a movie, with the camera focused on Mandy, but circling around her and showing what else was happening, with all the explosions and the energy around. Good job!
Chocolate Ninj4 2007-06-19 ch 48,	What the hell is Roari doing? He's crazy! Crazy, I tell you! Umm... Good chapter. I like the "three kinds of magic" thing. It makes the magical element of the world more complete and cohesive. Also the explanation of the way the magic works is nice. So, it'll be interesting to find out what the hell is up with the stairs, and what exactly the song means. I look forward to it!
Chocolate Ninj4 2007-06-13 ch 47,	So, this was a somewhat different and confusing chapter. I'm sure whatever happened between Tokei and Chris will be explained later (though I think I might know a little about what it was). But, anyway, yay for Chris being back! ^_^ I kind of missed him. Like how I miss Maxie now... But, I guess if he isn't involved with this part of the plot, he shouldn't be there... sigh Next time it shouldn't take me so long to read new chapters. This time it was just a little overwhelming. ^_^ P.S. What's with the "N" at the end of the chapter?
Chocolate Ninj4 2007-06-13 ch 46,	I really liked this chapter. Not a lot of stuff happened, but there were some great bits of writing, in the second half, like "Another breath swam through his fragile lips, disintegrating into the white room, and Lyss could not help but stare into space after it." I just liked it. Anyway, I'm going to keep reading now (this whole 6-chapters-at-one-time thing is great!).
Chocolate Ninj4 2007-06-13 ch 45,	I like what's been going on in the story. The tower is interesting, and it's all so new. Also with the new characters (esp. Tokei), and the changes to some of the old characters, I feel like the story is improving and developing well plotwise. What isn't as good, though, is the writing of the past few chapters (and maybe some of the following ones as well). It just seems like you got a little sloppy with them, like you did with (your) Chapter 37. It's probably just that you've been putting them out so quickly, but it's still disheartening to see. I know you can do better (you certainly have before)! Still, I want to read on, and so I'll do that now. ^^

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