Reviews for The Tragic Tale of Mindy the Overeater

Undead Serenade 2008-04-26 ch 1,	abuseI think I've felt like this sometimes...haha. But perhaps not quite to such an extreme. But metaphorically... Some parts flow, other stanzas are a little less nice, but they still seem to rhyme. The only rhyming I don't really like is 'jaws and claws'. She was too big for all her cloths But this was not most strange – She became what she always ate: To she candy she did change! And, do you means cloths or clothes? And "To she candy she did change!" - I don't understand at all. Do you mean to say: "To have seen candy she did change" or...I'm not sure, but it just doesn't make sense and I don't know your intention in the sentence to begin with, so I'm not much help.
toxic-noodle725 2006-04-21 ch 1,	abuseaw jesus! is that gonna happen to me? damn u should see how much candy i eat in a day...well i'll be waiting for the Gingercove.hee. i liked this poem. its like one of those Shel Silverstein poems only dark and kinda scary. good job. keep writing, i'd like to see more!
SerialXLain 2006-04-21 ch 1,	abuseHa cool. Morbid yet funny in a way... I like the nursery-rhyme feel to it but with the afore said morbid...ness. My reviews suck. All in all I liked this and great job. love xoxo