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| Jezsh 2006-05-16 ch 1,   | lovely. Brilliantly concise, I like how 'sting' in the first stanza and 'sing' in the third really brings the piece together. Great ending too. Great piece actually :) |
| boys kiss girls 2006-05-03 ch 1, | So trajic, yet beautiful. Great job. |
| Faithless Juliet 2006-04-29 ch 1, | Loved the simplicity of this; that summery vibe - writing lullabies in the sky makes me think of how you count clouds in the summer. Much love,Juliet. |
| classic violet 2006-04-25 ch 1, | this is truly beautiful and oh so gorgeous. it's just so vivid and all together compelling. |
| My New Pen Name 2006-04-25 ch 1, | I love the first stanza. . . it's good over-all, but the first stanza just does it for me. . . Excellent. |
| Moondog Dozier 2006-04-24 ch 1, | Wonderful voice in this. Makes the reader connect to the words, and understand the feeling. Good write. |
| contrast and friction 2006-04-24 ch 1, | This is just so pretty "sustaining the saturdays when we wrotelullabies in the sky" there's just that beautiful feeling of reflection .. like someone remembering & craving a feeling they wish that they could experience again. this is so simply done, but it's absolutely perfect that way. love the ending. love the whole thing. amazing write. |
| not sure yet 2006-04-24 ch 1, | o so prettyful excellent beautiful after staying up all night, beautiful poem |
| coal and marigolds 2006-04-23 ch 1, | "sustaining the saturdays," that's so pretty. I loved it. |
| sunday night sky 2006-04-23 ch 1, | 'heavy heart still stuck insustaining the saturdays' aww... love it. and the ending, its just saying how they were simple things but you miss them... *sigh* gorgeous. |
| mezzie 2006-04-23 ch 1, | "sustaining the saturdays".. tell me about it, it feels like you're pulling this straight out of my own life... weird : ) no wonder your writing always hits me in the heart... mezzie |
| cornered.sensations 2006-04-23 ch 1, | 'when we wrote lullabies in the sky', such a lovely and visual image created there. lovely piece, great work. |
| bright horizon splash 2006-04-22 ch 1, | 'heavy heart still stuck, in sustaining saturdays' - The visual is a sad girl looking out the window, just remembering. Well done. ~* |