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| MKtheMentalOne 2007-03-28 ch 1,   | I like this a lot! It's so sad, but it's nice in a way. ^^ |
| Kirsten Nussey 2006-06-18 ch 1, | Another good poem, though I think the flow is disrupted in places. For example, half way through when you jump from "These hands, whose are they?" to "At night I hunt" it sounds rushed. Also I noticed a slight error; in the line "My Yellow eyes stalk out prey," yellow should not have a capital letter. On the whole very good. |