Reviews for Pound Counting 101

Reviews For: Pound Counting 101

UnhappyPeople 2007-01-05 ch 5,	abuseI like that it seems we'll finally get some insight into Rickie/Janay's "past life". Also, the interactions between Geoff and Rickie are again really well written and, most importantly, the characters feel real. Her comment on Geoff's mysterious mascara made me laugh. The thing with writing what she really thinks in between what she says is a great technique. It reminds me of Christian Jungersen's "The Exception" which I just finished today (great psychological thriller btw). Anyway, keep it up!
UnhappyPeople 2006-12-24 ch 4,	abuseThe description of Rickie and Geoff's relationship is amazing, hitting just the right notes of detachment, awkwardness and dominance on Rickie's side. I can really visualize every gesture and tone of voice in their conversation. There's also something about the inclusion of TV shows and commercials in the background that makes it seem even more realistic. The quick, tense conversation with Klemet and the final lines of the chapter really work to get the reader hooked. Your writing style is as raw and to-the-point as always, fitting the fast pace and the way the protagonist's mind works. I love it!
Kelaia 2006-10-25 ch 4,	abuseAmazing chapter. I really love your style of writing. Even when practically nothing happens, there is still loads to read about and keep the reader hooked. I can't wait to find out what happens! Update soon, please.
UnhappyPeople 2006-10-04 ch 3,	abuseThere's definitely potential here. Your writing in the POV of Janay/Rickie is snappy and to-the-point. I too find it admirable that you have set yourself the challenge of writing like a Londoner, not to mention using slang and drug-dealing terms in the narrative ... and it's actually executed in a believable way. I especially like the Momentary Monologue. I also have to say that I don't agree with Taige's review - too much description does not work in subjective 1st person narrative (unless the narrator is the kind of person who pays a lot of attention to details). It breaks up the flow, and we're already given enough details to picture these characters' appearance ("black-encrusted fingernails", "filthy coat" - okay, so Charlie's a total mess). Keep up this style; it's fresh and it catches the reader's attention.
Taige 2006-08-28 ch 2,	abuseVery interesting. I like the style of speech, very casual and a lot like a londoner would speak. One problem I had with this was the lack of detail. I have no idea what anyone or anything looks like. Is Janay dressed as a professional lawyer-type? We know how the addict acts, but not what he looks like. More detail would really help this, but I can see how it would interrupt the tone of speech. Something you can play around with.
Kelaia 2006-08-28 ch 2,	abuseFirstly, thanks for reviewing my story. I really appreciate the sort of constructive criticism I can use when re-writing it. I realise the first few chapters are a bit shaky - i think it improves further on. Second, I really love your story! I can see how your writing style might not appeal to everyone, but I think it's really effective. I like that it's set in London, too. I haven't found many american writers who set thier stories in England. Good spelling and grammar - it's so much easier to read like that. Update, please!

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