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Destiny2RoseClan 2008-11-02 ch 19,	Oh wow. If I was in Lia's shoes, I think I would be confused aswel. Can't wait for your update.
hideseekkeep 2008-09-11 ch 19,	First off, I love that you've written a story with a Vietnamese protagonist. Coming from a Vietnamese background myself, I definitely can relate to a lot of the things going on in the story, which is great. I love the way you've written Lia's mother and definitely see a lot of reflections of some of my family members in her. Haha. Now for a little bit of constructive criticism: as your story is labeled under "Romance," I definitely came into this expecting, well, a romance. Thus far though, there's been a lot about Lia and the quirks of her family and we've got some glimpses of Tae. I feel like you might have put too much on this story by incorporating so much of the family stuff into it--it feels like it's detracting from the main story, which I'm assuming is or will be the relationship that develops between Lia and Tae (unless I'm completely off). It's been 19 chapters and it feels like all of that has been mostly exposition and only now are we getting into some truly interesting territory for the two characters. As much as I love what you've done in fleshing out the family members, I feel like a lot of it is filler and can be cut out. If you were to do that--either in future chapters or should you choose to go back and do some edits--I think it would definitely serve the larger story much better. I'm also a bit concerned about the character of Tae, whom thus far has been presented as a rather unsavory character. I do realize though that his character's presentation has been skewed a bit, since we've been seeing him mostly from Lia's POV. I know you've also mentioned future chapters in which we might get more of his perspective on things. I hope that we'll get to find some more redeeming characteristics in him, should he actually ever end up paired with Lia in some way, shape, or form. I hope the criticism isn't too harsh. Your piece is definitely quite unique and I think you've got some really great moments in it so far and it definitely has a lot of promise for what will happen in the future. I hope that you will get the opportunity to update soon. I'm definitely intrigued to find out what happens with Lia and Tae.
Quinn84 2008-08-20 ch 3,	OMG, i couldn't stop laughing...so damn funny!
thunderxblaze 2008-07-12 ch 4,	i definitely relate to the "cutting off your internet" punishment xD
fellow asian 2008-06-04 ch 8,	:D ah... i just LOVE those trick questions that asian moms ask during 234832094 hour long lectures. lol. very unique story.
I Murder on Impulse 2008-04-22 ch 19,	aNY MORE GONNA COME SOON?!
Zonne 2008-04-19 ch 1,	THis is cute, and originally I had this selected some text of the mom speaking early on because it was not correct, however, later you explain... so maybe make the explanation earlier? for those of us looking for grammar stuff. What I did like was her love for her calculator. I also liked the excellent development of the characters and Lia's control over her brother, which she enjoyed, and yet, she adored him. Perfect! the review marathon Zonne link in profile
Purple Uranium 2008-03-24 ch 19,	Re-read this. Laughed. Then wondered how your Spring Break went. Then I thought, "I wonder if I should harrass her and urge her to update." I could, but it probably wouldn't make a difference. Is school still kicking you in the **? I hope not, but then again, it's COLLEGE and you can't really expect much from college. At any rate, this is my subtle nudge to urge you to update. Because, you know, I did. And you didn't. Which is just sad. But I have time on my hands and you don't which just makes everything twice as sad. Wah. But yes. Update. Laterz!
Sweet Child 2008-03-06 ch 19,	This is an awesome story. I love it, with all it's quirky moments. So far, I'd say that Tae's my favorite character. I'm a freak like that. He's the **, with he's bipolar behavior. Oh, and he's really crappy at seducing Xp Lia is also funny, with her calculator obsession. But the girl is slightly too uptight. She just needs to loosen up a bit - like Toni. Ed is, as far as I can tell, the most suave of them. It doesn't matter what Lia says - he rocks. The only thing that is missing are more descriptions. I can't make myself a picture of Lia. You have written almost nothing about her, except for the fact that she is not as fit as her sister. Otherwise, I love what you have so far, and I hope that you'll update soon. Toodles!
kivvy 2008-03-03 ch 19,	hilarious story. thoroughly entertaining. i'm really anticipating how this will end. its very easy not to like tae, with his crude behavior. i'm curious as to how he will evolve as the story develops. will he turn out to be a decent human being after all? looking forward to your updates!
Zephyr Zucchini 2008-01-24 ch 19,	tackle My god I love you
Da Vinci at Work 2008-01-08 ch 12,	Haha. I LOVE THIS STORY. XD
Quadrophenia 2007-12-25 ch 19,	I hate to be pushy, but UPDATE! This story is hilarious. And I'm really excited to see how it unfolds..
XxFallenxX 2007-12-24 ch 19,	I love it. I really do. I also believe Tae should smash Dave in the face. :]
Written 2007-12-06 ch 19,	How did I miss updates? ! Lia is a riot, but Ed is where it's really at, seriously. He reminds me of my own brother. SIGH. Great update. Hilarity.

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