oh this is sad. Poor character. I like the way how the narrator kept saying he/she is going it for her/his crush/lover.

Wow, this is intense...not the happiest of themes, but I can understand this poem quite well. It flows really nicely and I love the repetition at the end of "Slash, slash, slash, slash, more, more, more." it's one of those things that build up emotions (to me at least...) I also like the way you use all caps for certain parts it really emphasizes the anger behind the words. The only thing that bugs me a bit about this poem is the line "Why? Do u ask" because you used "u" instead of "you," but because you wrote this at 1 AM, I'll forgive you. P Keep going! I love your poetry!

The emotion flows well from this piece. I actually wrote a song on this subject only mine has a happier ending I must say. Good job though.

It's good. I really like it, though the lines seem to get longer and longer as it goes on. *Shrugs* Maybe you meant to do this? I've written poetry like that before. I don't know. It's something my English teacher warned me about. It's really good, though. I can feel the emotion really well.

thats really good...very sad, but good

Wow... intense... the last word of this poem really ties it up... well done... but just one CC... "Because its ment to be" - it should be "Because it's meant to be"... other than that... it was good!

Wow. Really deep. Sounds like a lot of stuff i've written though. I went through a phase where all i wrote was poetry like this. So from one poet to another, very nice. You write well

This is really good, it's very descriptive and real. :-)

Once again all i have to say is wow. I love the sense of imagery created here... the language used is easily understood and overall I liked it and can relate to how the character seems to feel - (is that a good thing? lol). Well done.