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| in theory 2006-06-27 ch 1,  | abuseWow This grabs everything I felt about using pronouns excessively..and kinda squeezes it into one poem. Sometimes it feels as if "you" and "I" are the main features of most poetry, and it gets on my nerves (as well as being so totally addictive, and unavoidable for my own writing). The summary was just right too, kind of cryptic and welcoming. I loved reading this, especially licking the rain part..it was kind of arty and creepy and almost disgusting all in one go, I like it. Great work, been awhile since I saw anything from you (been slacking muchly recently, my own fault..) keep it up! :-D truly, jack |
| a lonely september 2006-06-02 ch 1, | abuseoh wow. hell, im so mad that i havent read your stuff in so long. i lovelovelove your work. especially this poem, it's awesome. so well written. . . i dont even know what to say, it's just so good. '(like I'd take a rope to see how it feels,/then I'd lick you inside out because you laugh like rain.' i love those lines. : ) |
| Faithless Juliet 2006-05-30 ch 1, | abuseI definitely get a sense of detachment in this; like you say in your summary, 'the muse that is but isn't' yet there is a line of obsession, almost lust for the idea of it. I think our idea's of people are safer then the actual reality of them. Or them with us. Or us wanting to be with them. Complicated piece, I love poetry that makes me think. Much love,Juliet. |
| Innocent-Violets 2006-05-19 ch 1, | abuseSpeechless...This is brilliant. |
| thursdays and rain 2006-04-25 ch 1, | abuseamazing! [+faves] |
| Charley Keed 2006-04-23 ch 1, | abuseWow. Very profound. I like the abstractness (if that's a word, even) of it, almost like a painting on words. Very interesting. |