Now I'm imagining what if I'm in Maybelle position?
Being 16 and about to fulfill her destiny.

I think it's good for her.
The sooner you find out our destiny is the better.
So, the adventure will soon begin :)

Even cooler that you got some kind of "servant" and friends..
hahaha. Nice!

I'm just wondering...
What makes Maybelle think and decide to leave the house and go to the Forrest?
well i know she's disappointed and mad.

Does her anger overcome her love for her dad?

Ok. I better get to know Maybelle.
Just getting started.

Nice. It makes me read.

She's brave to decide to go into the forrest.

she can control the weather depends on her mood?
that's not a good thing i think.
well at least now..i dont know yet whats the use of it.
haha.

She can also talk to anything, the winds, the trees, water, animals; basically everything that has a spirit.
Now..that is so cool...
i always wanna talk with my dog. since i dont really have a friend to talk to. haha.
yeah..its quite often that i talk to my dog..and amazingly..i think she understand...lol.

she can fly?awesome!

hahaha..its funny about the unimportant conversation they had...about all the handsome thingy.

so..they all teenagers going into adventure.

anyway..its kinda cool the way u added the info one by one..to build up the whole story..and help our imagination going on.

“Morning guys,” she greeted the trees, waving sweetly at them.

that is so cool!! Talking to the trees...greet the nature. its weird, but its cool =)

she's leaving??ok..that was fast..
but i bet...this is how all the adventure begin..

so...can't wait to read.. =)

Fantasy story...
You describe it really good.
It become a movie in my mind. hehe.
The father is still young...29?
but..how come that Maybelle is 16 years old??
So...he had Maybelle when he was 13..??
LOL!..interesting...
well, i just started reading.
i haven't read the whole story..i will read though.
Maybe there's a reason behind it.
plus...u'r saying
"something was about to change Maybelle's entire life and all the lies that were hidden from her would be revealed as her father sat down at the dinning table, looking sad as if he knew what that Maybelle would leave him."

aite...we'll see.

Nice intro tho..

weh? already 3 new chapters! sugoi! reviewnya gabung aja ya! =p

finally ada fight scenenya! haha the way you describe the monster is pretty good! (sampe kebayang lendir2nya >_

Hey hey ^_^ agh this chapter ends right before the adventure starts! ga sabar lanjutannya... =p that carving caliber gave is suspicious... does it have any use later on?

eh eh can you post flo and kate's picture somewhere? the way you describe them makes me want to see them in picture ^_^

hum.. that's all i think... keep it up ne! ganbatte!

ja!

My first signed review! harus bangga lo chel! (apa seh..haha)umm... thanks for answering my question! cuz it's been nagging in my head, hehe.I can't wait for the next chapters! ganbatte ne! keep it up! ^_^

-Ricky

moshi2 ^_^ kore wa ricky desu yo~!

hehe, you finally pusblished it, huh? i like the intro! it's more informative and makes me want to read the next chapter.. nice descriptions on the characters too..

my comments... well, there's the grammar, but hey! who cares about grammar =p (my english sucks too y know)

oh and i have a question! it's been nagging me for some time but... how come maybelle can go to get some water in the river if she's not allowed out of the house? just curious =p

okay that's all i think.. can't wait for the next chapter! ganbatte ne!