Reviews for Not the way I was taut

Reviews For: Not the way I was taut

dex2468 2006-07-03 ch 1,	abuseI really like it! Wow I got round to reviewing something - be impressed... umm..yeh anyway good poem!
breezy nostrils 2006-06-13 ch 1,	abusei like how your title showed almost a double entendre. mesh between his eyelashes to catch and hold a hundred or so tears - i like that image a lot, i think you perfectly described a person crying. there is tone in the time it eats up - silence is a scary thing sometimes, maybe that's why i always try to fill in the gaps. strength is the foundation of fascination - interesting philosphy. I was taught to stretchtaut so the lines of tornbravery (with the slaveryof learning to walkwithout fathering)wouldn't interferewith the image of baggage. - that's interesting cause i never got much fathering so it gives perspective when other people show their experience with parents. nice work!
diffident 2006-05-02 ch 1,	abuseWonderful. I think the world of poetry (or perhaps just FictionPress) has been overcome by too much estrogen, so it's refreshing to read poetry from a male (especially this). Once again, the stream of consciousness rhymes (bravery/slavery) and play with words (taught/taut) were wonderful and added so much to the poem. (PS: The dots on my haiku weren't to add a modern element. They were simply for spacing, and we can thank the QuickEdit system for that. Haikus are just so short. It feels so confined and constrained with out the spacing. In haiku books, the haikus are often placed randomly around the page, one per page, so I don't think I'm alone in that.) marie
AllyCred 2006-04-27 ch 1,	abuseI like the emotion that is in this, especially the lines about the tears, for me any poem with tears in it captures me and i tend to just flow into the mood, well done i really like this!
xHannahx 2006-04-26 ch 1,	abusereally liking the first stanza,tis good stuff. Han.
Calligrapher of Hearts 2006-04-25 ch 1,	abuseWord-play: delicious. Loved the imagery of the metal mesh to catch the tears. Thought it was beautiful Unca. Well done! xhXix
Faithless Juliet 2006-04-24 ch 1,	abuse“Not the way I was taut” - interesting play of words; taught/taut, when I read it the first time I got taught - like you teach someone, but upon further examination I get this new meaning - I like it - I can relate to the stretched t.h.i.n aspect. “There is mesh between his eyelashes/to catch and hold a hundred/or so/tears” - Men are such a strange breed, I don’t even know where to begin with you all. It is thought, (I think everywhere) but I know in my country, that it is weakness to be a man and (feel things) we’re a nation of reality TV - “fear factor,” “the real world” and you see all these big tough knock your socks off guys and of course that’s emulated, and don’t even get me started on what the steroid pumping sports industry as done to the children of the nation. I get the emotions between girl, and girl, and guy and girl but guy and guy is such an ocean for me. Like having to look through the keyhole at something, I have no idea what goes on behind those closed doors - not necessarily the locked doors of sexual innuendo (I get that) - but like the closed doors of conversation and thought on a level other then how many beers are left in the refrigerator. So, it’s interesting to me when I see male emotion, especially through tears which shows me pain - I don’t think I’ve ever even seen a man cry. “Strength is a foundation of/fascination” - I agree, I fight my own battles on that forefront. Strength can be very great or very small depending on the pain and the action that comes out of it. Like have you ever seen that movie “What dreams may come” with Robin Williams? It’s about all of this loss, and pain (it‘s beautiful, if you just look at it) but on the other side it’s just full of grief and loosing all of these people, and I can’t even fathom what it must be like to lose so many people so close to you and still be able to breathe. “And I am conquered by masculine/traits.” - Don’t you hate it when that happens! I have a weird effeminate thing with shoes - I can’t go into shoe stores anymore without dropping some significant cash on shoes that I’ll never wear, it gets my blood pumping, I have to have them! (With the slavery/of learning to walk/without fathering) - Interesting; I won’t lie - fathers scare me - it might just be my relationship with my own father but I don’t really trust men with children, it makes me jumpy. But I like the teaching aspect of this, like a leader would always be teaching, or giving, or helping and it would be a form of enslavement to no longer be “fathering.” Interesting all around, so many twists and turns. Juliet.
Aquafied 2006-04-24 ch 1,	abusesomething about this catches me out of the moment, algae filled swimming pools and makes me think i love this, it seems weak, not in the sense of badbut more of the characterization. anyhow, i would be able to concentrate better if my throat wasnt raw.
mez 2006-04-24 ch 1, anon.	abusethere is something revolutionary and courageous, even glorious about the indignant and unforgettable tone of this poem. the first two lines are exceedingly powerful and strength the extent of its influence, that if a feverish vivacity running down one's arms and tinkling theirs veins- you ahve no idea what you have created and what reaction you have triggered by doing so with the majesticity of ur skills.
Holly Rose E 2006-04-24 ch 1,	abuseThe wording is fantastic, and so are how the lines are set up. "strength is a foundationg of fascination"... brilliant. great job.

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