This poem is so...piercing. You somehow portray that they are fated to be together, but too much is putting bricks between them. I adore "stormchip eyes hushing/would-have-could-have/ brushing the zenith crafted of parentheses/and those things that go unsaid". I've heard 'stormy eyes' and other cliches, but I marvel at your ability to turn a trite comparison into something new and rich in imagery. :) keep writin'! `~bella~`

this is soo simple yet at the same time, such intricate work. i like it, a lot.

This is absolutely amazing love. I adore it.

I loved how you transitioned through out this. Poignant as well as brutal. I really loved your use of BOUND at the end (that seems trivial compared to the rest of the poem) but really ending it with that one word said so much to me. Lovely all around. A masterpice.

Much love,Juliet.

this made no sense and so much sense at the same time. great job! i especially liked the descriptions of she. very interesting writing style.