i like the flowing-ness of it! good choice of words and very descriptive in imagery and also emotion! fran ~*~

the only thing id change was in the last line-- was my goodbye to rash. first, 'to' should be 'too'. second, i think a question mark would just... make it better?? i dont know how to word it, but i think those two things would help.

other than that, you did an awesome job here. awesome. lol

keep on writing ~~M.W. Renaee-:|:-

an aboslutely great poem. i cant critisize it. your on my favourites list unless i have already added you. again a brilliant poem. keep writing looking forward to more.

Well said. Write on!

~Anna~