Reviews for Violent weeds kneeling

Reviews For: Violent weeds kneeling

Chandra-Moon 2006-05-13 ch 1,	abuseOoh, I really liked this, I had to read it a few times, though I probably still don't get it. I really liked "gardens are lying if they speak to greenly", that was very good and strong. And just the whole thing, it's very pretty and poetic and well done. Yay.
Animating the Mourned 2006-04-30 ch 1,	abuseThis is perhaps the third time I've erased my review and tried again. This poem deserves it. I find I have no real sugestion I just want to know the real interrpertation. :DThe imagery of the metaphor of a used lover is very strong to me. "we fit/fight" gives me the implication that they cheated and destroyed the aspect of love for you for ever...?
Farrie 2006-04-28 ch 1,	abuseWell sleep loss or not, I like it! Good work as usual. I'll read the rest when I get some more time... exams are close so that might take a while!
AllyCred 2006-04-27 ch 1,	abuseI love the intensity of this, the images you portray are so honest and real and for some reason i get the image of sex in this, especially from "dismounting aches" something about it, just appeals and reminds me of how much you ache for each other after the act! i like it!
xHannahx 2006-04-26 ch 1,	abusei really like this. you may think you have problems with it, but the way you portray romance is really uh.. real and honest without being sickly-sweet or mushy. :D beautiful images. Han.
breezy nostrils 2006-04-26 ch 1,	abusea lot of intense metaphors there. nice work.
Aquafied 2006-04-25 ch 1,	abusesomehow it catches me as mythologicalbut what isnt now a days? anyhow, very chalky for some reason. sticks to me. plantlife lately, is the new everythingbeauty is amazing in this but when is beauty not anyhow(long overdue. email = broken, which means i am navigating people to read)
Calligrapher of Hearts 2006-04-25 ch 1,	abuseI'm actually dumfounded. This is ** stunning! I can't pick only a single part of it to analyse, it's all so richly profound it takes my breath away. Think this could be my new favourite of yours Unca! Tip-tip-top form! wuvvlez xxhXixx
Faithless Juliet 2006-04-25 ch 1,	abuse(Greyest green sap is running over,/we mutter under sour juniper/bushes/mutely of all the previous eves;/and higher, bold Jupiter/blushes.) - I can’t ignore the religious references in this, even if you didn’t meann them, they popped right out at me as I read this first bit. “mutely of all the previous eves” I like the imagery of eves as evenings, but also I like it as a reference to Eve, as in Adam and Eve which brings about the whole Jesus (and everybody else) theme, and then you have: “bold Jupiter blushes” It might just be my huge fascination with Greek mythology but Jupiter/Zeus was the king of the Olympian Gods. Very interesting, I have to say that I thought bushes should have been on the same line as juniper (it felt a bit off) “I've never slept in something/so Eden-worn” - That is just gorgeous! There’s a Bob Dylan lyric that’s always haunted me: “No sound ever comes from the depths of Eden” and I just love it. Eden is fascinating (you‘ve pimped it a bit, I think) it’s strange, it’s supposed to be this paradise lost, but I’ve never wanted to go there, besides, I’ve always seen Adam as a bit of a misogynist. Why did he get to see/speak with god but not Eve? “As the grass/after moonlight” - you keep returning to the grass idea; I’m seeing all of these sights in mossy forests and waterlogged islands. “Climbing the creases around the face,/navigating with tongue in cheek,/I won't succumb to musk/filtered through leaf-light;” - how we try to fight desire, it’s like a tick (a no-no, if you will) The pain of fighting desire fascinates me, I’ve never been one to deny myself of something, more like I shift with it and then deal with whatever fallout arises. “I/scream teeth-talk/into a creamy corner of your shoulder,/we fit when we fight.” - I love how erotically provocative that is. “And violent weeds eat each other/for space, pulsing boys/take each other's place.” - I’m getting a one after the other aspect to this, lover after lover, pulsing boys - so bright at first it doesn’t seem real that they dull in our minds/hearts/body. I think people have aura’s, colors, like when you close your eyes and look at someone you can still see things behind your eyelids, colors, movement. I guess we have that in common, too many boys! It’s weird actually, I just wrote a whole bunch of poems with vegetation in mind throughout all of them (reading my mind, darling?) A series, coming soon to a computer screen near you. And in regards to the last review you just sent: I’ve noticed too that my work is leaning toward the regretful side. March was horrible for me, and April (though at first hopeful) hasn’t given me much better. Life, you know, it sucks sometimes. It’s leaning on some uneven keel - I actually feel like I’ve been asleep to so many issues going on around me for so long and now I’ve finally woken up and it all just pours out of me. True, as well that I do flaunt emotion easily; my writing professor told me once that he could tell that I had to be the center of attention in my work, and I think that over the years I’ve subconsciously perfected the technique of getting my audience to pay attention to me. I’m constantly in the state of mind of feeling something. I don’t know why really, I just feel things, it’s probably a character flaw though. So, chill boy, no more beers, come back to reality and stay awhile. Much love,Juliet.
Jezsh 2006-04-25 ch 1,	abusewell...I think it's beautiful. The images are incredible.

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